Acceptance letter to John for hiring him for a job position

by Anna
(Yonkers, NY, USA)

Original Text: Acceptance letter to John for hiring him for a job position


Names, addresses and personal identifications are deleted for privacy reasons.

Dear XXXX XXXXXX:

On the behalf of Valhalla Law Firm (VLF), I am pleased to offer you the position of Junior Associate Attorney, in-house department on the successful completion of your background. Thank you for your interest in our firm and the opportunity to prove your professionalism. This corporate, in-house opportunity will give you an insight into in-house practice and exposure to litigation, contracts, research and regulatory issues. Reviewing your resume you have prove what we are looking as a team.

The salary for this position is based on your experience, your starting salary will be $35,000 and health and life insurance benefits will be provided after 90 days of employment. John your expected starting date of employment is April 1st, 2011. Please report to XXXX XXXXXXX, Account Payroll Service at 9 a.m. for assistance.

Please signify your acceptance of my offer by signing and returning to me the enclosed copy of this letter along with the health documentation no later than March 25th, 2011. Your supervisor will schedule you to attend an interview within your first. In the meantime, I encourage you to review the Web resources for further information about your employment and the Firm.

I am pleased that you are joining the team and hope you will find your employment with VLF to be a rewarding experience. If you have any questions, please contact me at (xxx) xxx-xxxx.

Again, thank you.

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Revised Text:

Dear XXXX XXXXXX:

For Valhalla Law Firm (VLF), I am pleased to offer you the position of Junior Associate Attorney, In-house Department, on the successful completion of your background check.

Thank you for your interest in our firm and the desire to prove your professionalism. This corporate, in-house opportunity will give you an insight into In-house Practice and exposure to litigation, contracts, research and regulatory issues. On reviewing your resume, you have proven to be what we are looking for in a member of our team.

The salary for this position is based on your experience, and will start at $35,000. Health and life insurance benefits will be provided after 90 days of employment. John, your expected starting date of employment is April 1st, 2011. Please report to XXXX XXXXXXX, Account Payroll Service at 9 a.m. for assistance.

Please signify your acceptance of our offer by signing and returning to me the enclosed copy of this letter, along with the health documentation, no later than March 25th, 2011. Your supervisor will schedule you to attend an interview. In the meantime, I encourage you to review Web resources for further information on your employment and the Firm.

I am pleased that you are joining the team and hope you will find your employment with VLF to be a rewarding experience. If you have any questions, please contact me at (xxx) xxx-xxxx.

Again, thank you.

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