Are parents best teacher?

by Hyewon
(Seoul)

Original Text: Are parents best teacher?


I used to watch the reality TV show that deals with naughty child. It took one month, finally changing a naughty child from terror to angel. But there was somebody who changed totally like the child. They were parents. In the program, the first step to getting things done was changing parents. As this case shows, it is self-evident that parents are best teacher for child. The rationale behind this is in the following.


First off, parents teach their children knowledge which does not fall under the category of “textbook”. When I was a little girl, I asked my father. “Dad, when I’m walking down the street, where my eyes should be?” Even if the question was absurd to him, he answered clearly. The answer that I got was “Not too far but not too close.” Countless common sense, which makes me live an ordinary life, comes from my parents in this way.

Moreover, parents’ teaching has a significant impact on children’s life. As for me, parents encouraged me to save money by forcing me to make savings account deposit at banks. Thanks to it, I realize that the pleasure of buying what I want is not more than that of saving. Ever since I was a kid, their advices have helped me choose the paths and become the core principles for my life. It is more than just reading books or listening lessons. It will be remembered in my heart.


There’s a saying that I like. “The world’s best food is mother food.” It can also apply to this issue. Considering the extent to which knowledge or skills have been acquired from parents, the world's best teachers are none other than parents.

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Revised Text: Are parents the best teachers?

I used to watch a reality TV show that deals with a naughty child. It took one month, finally to change a naughty child from a terror into angel. But there were also some people who changed totally, like the child. They were the parents.

In the program, the first step to getting things done was changing the parents. As this case shows, it is self-evident that parents are the best teachers for the child. The rationale behind this is the following.

First off, parents teach their children knowledge which does not fall into the category of “textbook”. When I was a little girl, I asked my father, “Dad, when I’m walking down the street, where should my eyes be?” Even if the question was absurd to him, he answered clearly. The answer that I got was, “Not too far but not too close.” Common sense, which makes me live an ordinary life, comes from my parents in this way.

Moreover, parents’ teaching has a significant impact on childrens' lives. As for me, my parents encouraged me to save money by forcing me to make savings account deposits at banks. Thanks to that, I realize that the pleasure of buying what I want is not more than that of saving. Ever since I was a kid, their advice has helped me choose the best path and has become the core principle for my life. It is better than just reading books or listening to lessons, it will be remembered in my heart.

There’s a saying that I like, “The world’s best food is mother's food.” It can also apply to this issue. Considering the extent to which knowledge or skills have been acquired from parents, the world's best teachers are none other than our parents.

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