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Hello, ITS will be upgrading your current computer operating system from Windows XP to Windows7. Therefore, starting this Wednesday, a Support Services Specialist will stop by your workspace to assist you with copying your APA data to your P:\ or S:\ drive. We ask that you please remove your personal picture and music files.

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Revised Text:

Hello,

ITS will be upgrading your computer's operating system from Windows XP to Windows7.

Starting this Wednesday, a Support Services Specialist will stop by your workspace to assist you with copying your APA data to your P:\ or S:\ drive.

We ask that you please remove your personal picture and music files before then.

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