Autobiography

Original Text: Autobiography


I was born on April 19th, 1988, in Birmingham, AL. When I was five years old I moved to Lincoln, AL to live with my mother's parents and there I attended Lincoln Elementary School and Drew Middle School from 1993-1999. I then moved to Hueytown, AL to live with my mother and was home-schooled until 2003 when I returned to Lincoln to attend Lincoln High School. I graduated in 2006 Magna Cum Laude with an advanced diploma. I received the Silver Anniversary scholarship from Auburn University Montgomery and attended from 2006-2009 majoring in Pre-Veterinary Medicine. Due to familial and financial responsibilities, I transferred to JSU in January 2010 so I could live at home in Lincoln.
My lifelong and childhood dream was always to become a veterinarian. For as long as I can remember, I couldn't imagine myself doing anything else. Upon arriving at JSU, I changed my major to Animal Biology so I could apply to veterinary college but still have animal-related job opportunities if by very good chance I didn't get in to vet school. In May 2010, I took Ecology with Dr. Cline and enjoyed it immensely. After doing a bit of “soul searching” and looking at the grand aspect of things, I decided that I could do more and was finally “over” vet school. I changed my major concentration to Ecology and began a 2nd minor in Physical Geography per Dr. Cline's advice in addition to my Chemistry minor.
I plan to pursue my Master's in Biology at JSU and hope to then gain employment with a government agency in protection and conservation of our planet's wildlife and ecosystems. I know it was rather late in my college career to change my goals and my graduation is delayed as a result, but for the first time in a long time I feel like I'm right where I need to be, and it's a great feeling.

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Revised Text:

I was born on April 19th, 1988, in Birmingham, Alabama. When I was five years old I moved to Lincoln, Alabama to live with my mother's parents and there attended Lincoln Elementary School and Drew Middle School from 1993-1999. I then moved to Hueytown, Alabama to live with my mother and was home-schooled until 2003, when I returned to Lincoln to attend Lincoln High School.

I graduated in 2006, Magna Cum Laude, with an advanced diploma. I received the Silver Anniversary scholarship from Auburn University, Montgomery and attended from 2006-2009, majoring in Pre-Veterinary Medicine. Due to familial and financial responsibilities, I transferred to JSU in January 2010 so I could live at home in Lincoln.

My lifelong and childhood dream was always to become a veterinarian. For as long as I can remember, I couldn't imagine myself doing anything else. Upon arriving at JSU, I changed my major to Animal Biology so I could apply to veterinary college, but still have animal-related job opportunities if by very good chance I didn't get in to vet school. In May 2010, I took Ecology with Dr. Cline and enjoyed it immensely. After doing a bit of “soul searching” and looking at the grand aspect of things, I decided that I could do more and was finally “over” vet school. I changed my major concentration to Ecology and began a 2nd minor in Physical Geography per Dr. Cline's advice, in addition to my Chemistry minor.

I plan to pursue my Master's in Biology at JSU and hope to then gain employment with a government agency in protection and conservation of our planet's wildlife and ecosystems. I know it was rather late in my college career to change my goals and my graduation is delayed as a result, but for the first time in a long time I feel like I'm right where I need to be, and it's a great feeling.

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