Cell Yell

Original Text: Cell Yell


I wish they would have never invented cell phone and people have changed so much since I grew up in the late fifties up until the late nineties it seem after then things really changed I think people today do not what the word respect is . When you get on a bus in New York everyone on the bus has a cell phone and everyone is talking loud like the person their talking to is sitting right there with them . Yelling , talking about what they did the night before , and who they were with , like everyone wants to hear it. They are cursing and being rude and disrespectful . Back in the fifties and sixties and even the seventies they had payphones they would shut the door and you didn't have to hear them , and if someone called you would get up and excuse yourself and go to another room and have your conversation , it was all about the privacy but today they just don't care I think people should go back to the old ways and teach their children how to be respectful and about privacy and values .Everyone in there cars has a cellphone stuck to their head like the phone has grown out there head . It has gotten really ridiculous the way things have gotten . I wish we could go back to the old days.

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Revised Text:

I wish they would never have invented the cell phone. People have changed a lot since I grew up in the late fifties, and after the late nineties, it seems that things have really changed.

I think people today do not what the word respect mwans. When you get on a bus in New York, everyone has a cell phone, and everyone is talking loudly as if the person they're talking to is sitting right there with them . Yelling, talking about what they did the night before, and who they were with, like everyone wants to hear it. They are cursing, and being rude, and disrespectful.

Back in the fifties and sixties, and even the seventies, people used payphones and would shut the door so you didn't have to hear them. If someone called, you would get up and excuse yourself, go to another room and have your conversation. It was all about privacy, but today they just don't care. I think people should go back to the old ways and teach their children how to be respectful, and about privacy and values.

Everyone in their car has a cellphone stuck to their head, like the phone has grown out of it. It has gotten really ridiculous. I wish we could go back to the old days.


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