Community Service

Revised Text: Community Service


Community service allows individuals to contribute to their community and to promote a better society. Community service should be performed based on individuals’ awareness to their surroundings and their willingness to serve others. Community service should not be seen as an obligation or a punishment. It should not be done just to obtain a reward or recognition. For this reason, people are not being forced or being paid to perform a community service, instead they volunteer to improve the quality life of others. Through community service, I develop a sense of awareness and understanding about others. I realized that as a social being, helping others should be a part of a human nature.

Although there are many reasons why people perform community service, individuals tend to dedicate their time and energy for altruistic acts. We live in a society where we interact with others in our daily life. We rely on others for food, job, education, and transportation. Individuals cannot be concern and think only for themselves because we live in a place where society plays an important role in our lives. Individuals and their community are like a two-way street. Community consists of individuals and is shaped by individuals. Likewise, individuals are shaped by the community they live in. Our behavior, thoughts, feelings, and decisions are influenced by our society.

Almost every individual have contributed to their society whether we realize it or not. They have participated in their community as individuals adopt social values in their lives, follow rules established in the society, and function within the intuitions of society. Our achievements have also improved and advanced our society. For instance, millions of lives have been saved up until today thanks to Clara Barton, the founder of the American Red Cross. Yet, not all individuals are being supported or acknowledged by their society. As a result, individuals are less likely to give back to their society when they are not being valued by their society. Thus, community service is a way that we could appreciate, help, acknowledge, and value other beings.

Community service benefits individuals and the world around them. Community service encourages individuals who are being helped to grow, to become productive, and to strengthen their community in return. Thus, when individuals make a difference in their community, they are also making a difference in their lives.

I believe that community service means so much more than just helping other people because community service also helps individual to connect with more people, to develop new skills, to learn from others, to gain a better understanding about their society, and to improve themselves in becoming a civilized and a moral person.

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Revised Text:

Community service allows individuals to contribute to their community, and to promote a better society. This service should be performed based on individuals’ awareness of their surroundings and their willingness to serve others. IT should not be seen as an obligation or a punishment and should not be done just to obtain a reward or recognition.

For this reason, people are not being forced or paid to perform a community service, instead they volunteer to improve the quality of life for others. Through community service, I develop a sense of awareness and understanding of others. I realized that, as a social being, helping others should be a part of a human nature.

Although there are many reasons why people perform community service, individuals tend to dedicate their time and energy for altruistic acts. We live in a society where we interact with others in our daily life. We rely on others for food, jobs, education, and transportation. Individuals cannot be concern about, and think only of themselves, because we live in a place where society plays an important role in our lives. Individuals and their communities are like a two-way street. The community consists of individuals and is shaped by individuals. Likewise, individuals are shaped by the community they live in. Our behavior, thoughts, feelings, and decisions are influenced by our society.

Almost every individual has contributed to their society, whether they realize it or not. They have participated in their communities as they adopted social values in their lives, followed rules established in the society, and functioned within the institutions of the society. Our achievements have also improved and advanced our society. For instance, millions of lives have been saved up up to today thanks to Clara Barton, the founder of the American Red Cross. Yet, not all individuals are being supported or acknowledged by their society. As a result, individuals are less likely to give back to their society when they are not being valued by their society. Thus, community service is a way that we can appreciate, help, acknowledge, and value other beings.

Community service benefits individuals and the world around them. Community service encourages individuals who are being helped to grow, to become productive, and to strengthen their community in return. Thus, when individuals make a difference in their community, they are also making a difference in their lives.

I believe that community service means so much more than just helping other people because community service also helps individuals to connect with more people, to develop new skills, to learn from others, to gain a better understanding about their society, and to further their becoming civilized and a moral persons.


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