Comp1

by Tiffany
(Tennessee, USA)

Original Text: Comp1


I live in Calhoun Tennessee a small town near Chattanooga. There is really nothing in Calhoun except a paper mill called Bowater. The town has a lot of resident’s that have been laid off from their jobs. We are a poor community with high drug rates. In saying a local man has sold five hundred and three acres to a construction company. The site is going to be a rock quarry and possible concrete plant. There have been flyer’s running rampant through our community and all this company say’s is that it’s lies. How do we know is what I would like to know, because I along with other residents have concerns.
My main concern about this rock quarry is the health risks due to the lime dust. The reason this is my main concern is because, my father has severe emphysema and wears oxygen at times my son also has severe allergies. The possibility that they might not be able to go outside without a mask is horrible. The reason it is a great concern is the fact this rock quarry will be located in my back yard.

This rock quarry is going to be located right in my back yard. The drive way leading into it is cutting into my parent’s driveway. One of the issues with it being in my back yard is will it bring my property value down. No one would want to buy a house with a rock quarry at their back door. So I don’t know if I would ever be able to sell my house.

My community just had a meeting the other day at the elementary school about how to ban this quarry. They keep telling us the town needs it, but no one want’s it. The complaints voiced are all like mine property value, health issues, and property damage. This one man brought up property damage, because our houses could possibly be knocked off their foundations.

Another big concern is for our local wildlife that live on these hundreds of acres. I always have close to fifteen deer in my back yard daily, and they are going to lose their homes. None of our higher ups around here seem very concerned, because all they are seeing are the dollar signs. They also need to think about the fish in the river they are going to be using the water. That will affect their habitat also because of the water treatment plant.

My conclusion is that this community needs to band together and just say NO. There are too many risks for this quarry to go in our community. Just because the money might roll in is not the only big picture. People’s health, lively hood, and way of life should be more important. Say no to the possible hundred or more dump trucks running up and down the road where my child plays, and my animals run around at. This is a severe matter to all in my community we need to let our voices be heard. Absolutely no rock quarry.
My information was taken from www.newschannel9.com and www.notothecalhounrockquarry.com .

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Revised Text:

I live in Calhoun, Tennessee, a small town near Chattanooga. There is really nothing in Calhoun except a paper mill named Bowater. The town has many residents who have been laid off from their jobs. We are a poor community with a high drug rate.

A local man has sold five hundred three acres to a construction company. The site is going to be a rock quarry and possibly a concrete plant. There have been fliers running rampant through our community and all this company says is "they are lies." What I would like to know is "How do we know?", because I, along with other residents, have concerns.

My main concern about this rock quarry is the health risks due to the lime dust. The reason this is my main concern is because my father has severe emphysema and uses oxygen at times. My son also has severe allergies. The possibility that they might not be able to go outside without a mask is horrible. The reason this is a great concern, is the fact that this rock quarry will be located right in my back yard.

The road leading into the quarry is cutting into my parent’s driveway. One of the issues with it being in my back yard is, will it bring my property value down. No one would want to buy a house with a rock quarry at their back door. I don’t know if I would ever be able to sell my house.

My community just had a meeting the other day at the elementary school about how to ban this quarry. They keep telling us the town needs it, but no one wants it. The complaints voiced were all like mine; property value, health issues, and property damage. One man brought up property damage, because our houses could possibly be knocked off their foundations.

Another big concern is for our local wildlife that live on these hundreds of acres. I have close to fifteen deer in my back yard daily and they are going to lose their homes. None of our higher-ups around here seem very concerned. All they are seeing are the dollar signs. They also need to think about the fish in the river because they are going to be using the water. That will affect the fish habitat and also the water treatment plant.

My conclusion is that this community needs to band together and just say NO. There are too many risks for this quarry to be going into our community. Just because the money might roll in is not the only concern. People’s health, livelihoods, and our way of life should be more important.

Say no to the possible hundred, or more, dump trucks running up and down the road where my child plays and my animals run around. This is a major matter to all in our community and we need to let our voices be heard. Absolutely no rock quarry.

My information was taken from: www.newschannel9.com and www.notothecalhounrockquarry.com

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