Cover Letter 3

by HS
(BK, NY)

Original Text: Cover Letter


As a Development and Events Manager with over 6 years of event management experience, I believe that my background and strong accomplishments would be a valuable addition to Teach For America. My outstanding work ethic and my ability to create events that are impressive and highly cost effective have been a key factor in my success. I have expertise in developing long-term partnerships with vendors and corporate partners.

Some of my greatest qualifications include:

• Ability to work with diverse departments, such as marketing, public relations, policy and programs and creative
• Superior vendor negotiations relating to event contracts involving pricing and logistics
• Ability to provide a clear vision and direction to event support staff and organization’s management team
• Conceptualizing events and enhancing them with themes that promote the organization’s mission and brand

Given the combination of these factors, I feel confident that I would be a vital member of your organization. I offer varied experiences in event execution especially in relation to fundraisers and donor cultivation activities.

I welcome the opportunity to meet with a representative of your organization to further discuss your specific needs. Attached is my resume to give you a comprehensive overview of my qualifications. Thank you for your time and consideration and I look forward to hearing from you.

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Revised Text:

As a Development and Events Manager with over 6 years of event management experience, I believe that my background and strong accomplishments would be a valuable addition to Teach For America. My outstanding work ethic and my ability to create events that are impressive and highly cost effective have been a key factor in my success. I have expertise in developing long-term partnerships with vendors and corporate partners.

Some of my greatest qualifications include:

• Ability to work with diverse departments, such as marketing, public relations, policy and programs and creative

• Superior vendor negotiations relating to event contracts, involving pricing and logistics

• Ability to provide a clear vision and direction to event support staff and an organization’s management team

• Conceptualizing events and enhancing them with themes that promote the organization’s mission and brand

Given the combination of these factors, I feel confident that I would be a vital member of your organization. I offer varied experiences in event execution, especially in relation to fundraisers and donor cultivation activities.

I welcome the opportunity to meet with a representative of your organization to further discuss your specific needs. Attached is my resume, giving a comprehensive overview of my qualifications. Thank you for your time and consideration, I look forward to hearing from you.

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