Cover Letter

by Maycee
(Twin Falls, Idaho, USA)

Original Text: Cover Letter


Maycee Reeder

April 9, 2011

Xxxxxx Xxxxxx:

I am very interested in working for Xxxxxx Xxxxxx as a hostess. I feel that my abilities to work well on a team as well as my experience in leadership positions make my very well suited for the job that I am applying for. Being involved in an officer position for student council and FFA, as well as being on athletic teams, have strengthened my ability to work well in a team. I work very well this people and take tremendous pride in my work ethic.
Every time I have been to Xxxxxx Xxxxxx the people are kind as well as the great food and I would love to take part in that.
In summary, my experience in leadership positions, working well in teams, hard work ethic, and abilities to work well with people can be beneficial to your company’s advantage.
If you have questions, please call me at (xxx)xxx-xxxx. I look forward to hearing from you soon.
Sincerely,
Maycee Reeder

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Revised Text:


Maycee Reeder

April 9, 2011

Xxxxxx Xxxxxx:

I am very interested in working for Xxxxxx Xxxxxx as a hostess. I feel that my ability to work well on a team, as well as my experience in leadership positions, makes me very well suited for the job I am applying for. Being involved as an officer of the student council and in the FFA, as well as being on athletic teams, has strengthened my ability to work well in a team. I work very well with people and take tremendous pride in my work ethic.

Every time I have been to Xxxxxx Xxxxxx, the people were kind and the food great. I would love to be a part of Xxxxxx Xxxxxx.

In summary, my experience in leadership positions, working well on teams, a good work ethic, and abilities to work well with people can be beneficial to your company.

If you have questions, please call me at (xxx)xxx-xxxx. I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Sincerely,
Maycee Reeder

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