Email

by Louise
(Halifax, NS Canada)

Original Text: Email



I just noticed that you had a telephone message on your phone. I do not understand why the call did not transfer to Jeanette's phone as your phone is call forwarded to her line. This message was left on September 13th. From now on, we will have to check your phone daily even though your phone is call forwarded to another phone.

Please call Melanie Parker or Lorraine at 613-842-7255. She is calling on behalf of Martin Parker in Ottawa to follow-up on your last meeting with Mr. Parker in regard to PSMIT. She wishes to know if you need to schedule another meeting with Mr. Parker.

P.S. I call Melanie today to explain that I just noticed her telephone message. She was not in today, but spoke with another assistant, Lorraine. She will give the message to Melanie tomorrow that we just notice her message today. Lorraine advises that Melanie was following up in regards to scheduling a second meeting, if necessary. Please confirm with Melanie when you have a chance.

Take care and have a good day,

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Revised Text:


I just noticed that you had a telephone message on your phone. I do not understand why the call did not transfer to Jeanette's phone, as your phone forwards to her line. This message was left on September 13th. From now on, we will have to check your phone daily, even though your phone is call forwarded to another phone.

Please call Melanie Parker or Lorraine at 613-842-7255. She is calling on behalf of Martin Parker in Ottawa to follow-up on your last meeting with Mr. Parker regarding PSMIT. She wishes to know if you need to schedule another meeting with Mr. Parker.

P.S. I called Melanie today to explain that I just noticed her telephone message. She was not in today so I spoke with another assistant, Lorraine. She will give the message to Melanie tomorrow that we just noticed her message today.

Lorraine advises that Melanie was following up in regards to scheduling a second meeting if necessary. Please confirm with Melanie when you have a chance.

Take care and have a good day,

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