Experience

by Lisa Pan
(Beijing)

Original Text: Experience


My husband and I were deeply impressed by each other on our first meeting. As colleagues, we had usually had meals and played; but we were not lovers then. We were so implicit that we could only unrequitedly love each other. After my husband got a visa for studying in Canada, our friends held a farewell party for him

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Revised Text:

My husband and I were deeply impressed by each other at our first meeting. As colleagues, we had usually had meals and played together, but we were not lovers then. We were so reticent that we could only have an unrequited love. After my husband got a visa for studying in Canada, our friends held a farewell party for him.

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Feb 17, 2011
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by: Liudmila

Nice topic and great proofreading!

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