Feeding Time

by JT
(Arizona)

Original Text:


Recently I was at the cat house in the zoo. Right before feeding time. The tigers and lions were lying about on benches and little stands. Basking in the late-afternoon sun. They seemed tame and harmless. But when the meat was brung in, a remarkable change occurred. All the cats got up and moved toward the food. I was suddenly aware of the rippling muscles' of their bodies and their large claws and teeth. They seemed three times bigger, I could feel their power.

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Revised Text:

Recently I was at the cat house in the zoo just before feeding time. The tigers and lions were lying about on benches and little stands, basking in the late-afternoon sun. They seemed tame and harmless but when the meat was brought in, a remarkable change occurred. All the cats got up and moved toward the food. I was suddenly aware of the rippling muscles of their bodies and their large claws and teeth. They seemed three times bigger, I could feel their power.


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