Health

by Hali
(York)

Original Text: Health


Health is considered one of the most important sectors in governments' strategies around the world. In other words, governments concentration on this vital area more carefully than in previous decades. This improvement in health services is obvious from providing the enormous budgets on it .This essay will describe the importance of being the health under the direct supervision of government, after which some arguments will be discussed.
First of all, it has been known that healthy life is an essential agent to give people the opportunity to live without drawbacks. More specific, effective strategies are needed in order to achieve and maintain good health. This includes stress management, health care, wellness programs, social activity, hygiene, and observations of daily living. In addition, the responsibility of government for health should include protection and undertake that that responsibility by implementation the essential public health functions.
Another important thing for human life need is keeping away from significant and fatal illnesses such as cancer and infectious diseases which form a major challenge for communities. Pollution one of the causes of diseases, whether air or water pollution, for example, there are many diseases prevalent in the environment due to poor oversight and lack of health awareness by health officials in the government such as asthma and poisoning due to inhalation of fumes of factories and the exhaust.
As for water pollution, there are a large part of the responsibility lies with the government. These duties are to know the sources of water and purification to reach to the consumer safer.

There are some arguments that governments may not be involved in personal healthy issues .However, as not everyone has enough knowledge and qualification on the aspect of health, they may just follow advertisings or unreliable consultants, which, inversely, could increase the potential risk of unhealthy lifestyle, since the inappropriate guidance from advertisings or consultants. Therefore, government should formulate policies to guide citizens to establish healthy lifestyles.

To conclude, from above information it is has been clear the importance of being the supervision on health services in government hand to be more responsible and able to provide other facilities for future. So, in my view, I definitely agree with the statement which claimed the best way to keep the health in the safe side is being the health in governments' hand.

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Revised Text:

Health is considered one of the most important sectors in governments' strategies around the world. In other words, governments are concentrating on this vital area more carefully than in previous decades. Improvement in health services is obvious due to the providing of enormous budgets for it.

This essay will describe the importance of having health under the direct supervision of governments, after which some arguments will be discussed.

First of all, it has been known that a healthy life is an essential agent to give people the opportunity to live without drawbacks. More specificly, effective strategies are needed in order to achieve and maintain good health. These include stress management, health care, wellness programs, social activities, hygiene, and observations of daily living. In addition, the responsibility of governments for health should include protection and undertaking that responsibility by implementing essential public health functions.

Another important thing that human life needs is keeping away from significant and fatal illnesses, such as cancer, and infectious diseases, which form a major challenge for communities.

Pollution one of the causes of diseases, whether air or water pollution. For example, there are many diseases prevalent in the environment due to poor oversight and a lack of health awareness by health officials in the government. These include asthma and poisoning due to inhalation of the fumes of factories and exhaust.

As for water pollution, a large part of the responsibility lies with the government. It's duties are to know the sources of water and the purification of the water to allow it to reach the consumer more safely.

There are some arguments that governments should not be involved in personal health issues, however, as not everyone has enough knowledge and qualifications on all the aspects of health, they may just follow advertisements or unreliable consultants which, inversely, could increase the potential risk of an unhealthy lifestyle, given the inappropriate guidance from the advertisements or consultants. Therefore, government should formulate policies to guide citizens to establish healthy lifestyles.

To conclude, from the above information, the importance of supervision on health services is clear if the government is to be more responsible and able to provide other facilities for the future. So, in my view, I definitely agree with the statement which claimed that the best way to keep healthy is for health to be in governments' hands.

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