I Love You to the Sky/ Query Letter

by Sherry Colombari
(Massachusetts)

Original Text: I Love You to the Sky/ Query Letter


I would like to introduce you to Joseph and Paulina, my beloved in-laws. Their amazing story begins when they were immigrant children and found each other while waiting to board the ship that would take them to the United States. They sailed from Sicily Italy to Ellis Island and were together for almost sixty five years. Paulina’s Father becomes ill at the age of forty six to an unknown disease, and his family believes he is insane. Years later, her six siblings start to show the same symptoms. This disease is now given a name, Alzheimer’s. While Paulina courageously helps her siblings who can no longer care for themselves, she begins to show symptoms as well. With Joseph at her side, he cradles her for as long as he is able until cancer strikes. I am seeking representation for my novel. I Love you to the Sky, Complete with 55,000 words, and is based on true events. A unique love story about the deepest devotion between two people I have ever witnessed.

This book was inspired by how they lived life and accepted Alzheimer’s as part of their fate but never let it destroy their spirit. God took notice to their special bond and called them home almost a year apart to the day. Sparing them the heart wrenching pain of having to say goodbye to each other, which makes this an unusual touching story, their journey begins in Sicily Italy and then to New York City, and finally to the Berkshire Mountains in Massachusetts where they made their home.

What makes this different? This book stands alone in two important ways. First, this is the only book written about a couple whose immediate family also suffers from disease. Second, she becomes a victim herself while caring for them. Some stories need deep tragedy and separation from the people we love to establish life lessons, as well as strong devotion to wrap around the reader’s heart. This embraces the depth of love and remembrance of the human spirit. This book will be marketable to a wide audience, and at 55,000 words, it is short enough to be cost-effective to publishing houses.

I have poems published in the Berkshire Eagle and in the Berkshire writer's magazine and have completed creative writing courses at Berkshire Community College, and I am a member of The Berkshire Writing Group. I have a brief synopsis ready for your review. Thank you for your time.

Regards,

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Revised Text:

I would like to introduce you to Joseph and Paulina, my beloved in-laws. Their amazing story begins when they were immigrant children and found each other while waiting to board the ship that would take them to the United States. They sailed from Sicily, Italy to Ellis Island and after that, were together for almost sixty five years.

Paulina’s Father became ill at the age of forty six from an unknown disease, and his family believed he was insane. Years later, her six siblings started to show the same symptoms. This disease is now given the name, "Alzheimer’s."

While Paulina courageously helped her siblings who could no longer care for themselves, she began to show symptoms as well. Joseph was at her side, and he cradled her for as long as he was able, until cancer struck.

I am seeking representation for my novel, "I Love you to the Sky", complete with 55,000 words, and is based on true events. A unique love story about the deepest devotion between two people that I have ever witnessed.

This book was inspired by how they lived life and accepted Alzheimer’s as a part of their fate, but never let it destroy their spirits. God took notice of their special bond and called them home a year apart, almost to the day. This spared them the heart wrenching pain of having to say goodbye to each other, which makes this an unusually touching story.

Their journey began in Sicily and then to New York City, and finally to the Berkshire Mountains in Massachusetts, where they made their home.

What makes this different? This book stands alone in two important ways. First, this is the only book written about a couple whose immediate family also suffers from Alzheimer’s disease. Secondly, she becomes a victim herself while caring for them. Some stories need deep tragedy and separation from the people we love to establish life's lessons, as well as strong devotion to wrap around the reader’s heart. This story embraces the depth of love and remembrance of the human spirit. This book will be marketable to a wide audience, and at 55,000 words, it is short enough to be cost-effective to a publishing house.

I have had poems published in the Berkshire Eagle and in the Berkshire writer's magazine and have completed creative writing courses at Berkshire Community College, and I am a member of The Berkshire Writing Group. I have a brief synopsis ready for your review. Thank you for your consideration.

Regards,


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