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THe little Sandma who has just walked out of the forest tells the childres that he loves them dearly and that he has come to put them to sleep. He puts grains of sand into their eyes and as he leaves they can brely keep their eyes open. Sarah reminds John to say their evening prayer and after they pray theu fall aspeep on the forest floor.

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Revised Text:

The little Sandma, who has just walked out of the forest, tells the children that he loves them dearly and that he has come to put them to sleep. He puts grains of sand into their eyes, and as he leaves, they can barely keep their eyes open.

Sarah reminds John to say their evening prayer, and after they pray, they fall asleep on the forest floor.

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