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Please improve this sentence:

From my own observations as a college professor for the past 12 years, I've found that many students primarily want to concentrate on the classes required for their majors, and kind of just go through the motions for electives.

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Revised Text:

From my own observations as a college professor for the past 12 years, I've found that many students want to concentrate primarily on the classes required for their majors, and will just go through the motions for their electives.

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