Letter

Original Text: Letter


We are excited at the San Antonio Restaurant Association! Our Chili Pepper Golf Classic is celebrating its’ 20th Anniversary! We would like to invite you to participate in this year’s tournament at the Hyatt Hill Country Golf Club on Monday May 9, 2011.

For twenty years the Chili Pepper has generated funds for scholarships, SARA programs and for our FS Prep High School Culinary Art curriculum. Throughout our years we have been able to raise over $300,000.00 for these programs. This can all be attributed to your support of our tournament.

Every year our goal for this year’s tournament is to raise $1,000 for each year of the existence of the Chili Pepper Golf Classic. As a Friend of SARA we are respectfully asking for a donation in order to achieve this goal.

If you have any questions please do not hesitate to call the association office at xxx-xxxx.

Thank you for your support and participation!

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Revised Text:

We are excited at the San Antonio Restaurant Association! Our Chili Pepper Golf Classic is celebrating its’ 20th anniversary and we would like to invite you to participate in this year’s tournament at the Hyatt Hill Country Golf Club, on Monday, May 9, 2011.

For twenty years the Chili Pepper has generated funds for scholarships, SARA programs, and for our FS Prep High School Culinary Art curriculum. Throughout these years, we have been able to raise over $300,000.00 for these programs. This can all be attributed to your support of our tournament.

Every year our goal for the year’s tournament is to raise $1,000 for each year of the existence of the Chili Pepper Golf Classic. As a Friend of SARA, we are respectfully asking for a donation in order to achieve this goal.

If you have any questions please do not hesitate to call the association office at xxx-xxxx.

Thank you for your support and participation!

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