Magic Nature

by Marry
(Toledo)

Original Text: Magic Nature


The consequences of a crime depend on the system we live in, and the authority that created our system. In our world, we place authority in the hands of a system; usually political or religion. Billy and Caliban are different from us; their authority is nature and magic respectively. Billy tried to murder a lady who was destroying nature and his source of living. On the other hand, Caliban planned a plot to murder Prospero, who took his island and inflicted pain upon him using magic. Every system has its own judiciary; trying Billy and Caliban for their crime according to the judiciary of their authority will give us a fair conclusion. Some aspects that can be examined about each character are: how well did each character obey the laws, how much right did each character have within his system, and what was the motive behind their action? Judging the two by their respective authority, Caliban is guilty of crimes against his authority while Billy is working correctly within the boundaries of his law.
Caliban tried to murder someone who brought him up and gave him education, but the person Billy killed was destroying nature. It was nature that provided Billy with most of his knowledge and skills; it seems to be that Billy was loyal to his authority which gave him most of the knowledge and source of living. Where as, Caliban tried to murder Prospero to gain all the authority. Billy can be justified because he did that not to just save his life but also that of rabbits and consequently the dogs. Caliban just wanted revenge because he was punished for trying to rape Miranda who helped him to be knowledgeable to communicate like normal human beings. Billy was loyal to his authority, and what ever he did was for survival and to save nature. Caliban used his authority for his survival, and now he wants to take over the society. A crime to save the authority, and a crime to take over the society can clearly plead the latter guilty.

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Revised Text:

The consequences of a crime depends on the system we live in, and the authority that created the system. In our world, we place authority in the hands of a system, usually political or religious.

Billy and Caliban are different from us, their authority is nature and magic respectively. Billy tried to murder a lady who was destroying nature and his source of livlihood. On the other hand, Caliban plotted to murder Prospero, who took his island and inflicted pain upon him, using magic.

Every system has its own judiciary. Trying Billy and Caliban for their crimes, according to the judiciary of their authority, will give us a fair conclusion. Some aspects that can be examined about each character are; how well did each character obey the laws, what rights did each character have within his system, and what were the motives behind their actions? Judging the two by their respective authorities, Caliban is guilty of crimes against his authority, while Billy is working correctly within the boundaries of his law.

Caliban tried to murder the one who brought him up and gave him an education, but the person Billy killed was destroying nature. It was nature that provided Billy with most of his knowledge and skills. It seems that Billy was loyal to his authority, which gave him most of his knowledge and was source of his livelihood, whereas Caliban tried to murder Prospero to gain all of the authority. Billy can be justified because what he did was not to just save his life, but also those of the rabbits and consequently of the dogs. Caliban just wanted revenge because he was punished for trying to rape Miranda, who helped him to be knowledgeable and to communicate like a normal human being.

Billy was loyal to his authority, and whatever he did was for survival and to save nature. Caliban used his authority for his survival, but he also wanted to take over the society. A crime to save the authority, and a crime to take over the society are clearly different.

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