Midterm Caught'ya Test

by Liz
(GA)

Original Text: Midterm Caught'ya Test


“Bizarre,” Sam Sagacious muttered to himself as he took notes. The rest of the day went pretty much the same. The teachers for the most part were clad in somber colors, and they had no sense of humor.
Unfortunately, in science class the friends found there old nemesis, Orson Odious. As they entered the room, Orson was holding court in the back between many of the popular kids.
”Ah, guys look at the weird ones who just entered science class,” Orson said maliciously. “There’s the witch that can’t do a spell right, the free spirit that even wears stupid plastic butter-flies in her hair, the crybaby, the lazy one who never has her homework, and the two that think they’re funny.” “What losers,” he stated, and he chucked too his audience and encouraged them to laugh.
”I’m sorry, my parents made my buds and me late this morning, and me and my buds missed two of the geeks getting caught by the Dean,” expounded Odious Orson, as he concluded his verbal attack.
The intrepid 6 and Jocose, Jesse heads down, slunk into seats in the front of the room, just as the science teacher entered, and closed the door behind him. When, the class saw their teacher silence reigned, even from the back of the room where Orson’s gang sat.

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Revised Text:

“Bizarre,” Sam Sagacious muttered to himself, as he took notes. The rest of the day went pretty much the same. The teachers, for the most part, were clad in somber colors, and they had no sense of humor.

Unfortunately, in science class the friends found their old nemesis, Orson Odious. As they entered the room, Orson was holding court in the back, among many of the popular kids.

”Ah, guys, look at the weird ones who just entered.” Orson said maliciously. “There’s the witch that can’t do a spell right, the free spirit that wears stupid plastic butter-flies in her hair, the crybaby, the lazy one who never has her homework, and the two that think they’re funny.”

“What losers,” he stated, and chuckled to his audience and encouraged them to laugh.

”I’m sorry. My parents made my buds and me late this morning, and me and my buds missed two of the geeks getting caught by the Dean,” expounded Odious Orson, as he concluded his verbal attack.

The Intrepid 6 and Jocose Jesse, heads down, slunk into seats in the front of the room, just as the science teacher entered and closed the door behind himself. When the class saw their teacher, silence reigned, even from the back of the room where Orson’s gang sat.

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