Money Cannot Buy Happiness?

Original Text: Money Cannot Buy Happiness?


There is an old cliché that says: Money can buy happiness. Fitzgerald uses this saying as a basis for the theme of his book. In “The Great Gatsby”, Gatsby learns the validity of that cliché the hard way. Gatsby is challenged mentally in his quest for happiness. He learns who to trust, who to befriend, and ultimately how to live as a wealthy man in this time period.
Gatsby is introduced as a wealthy man who throws lavish parties and a great deal of friends. Gatsby, though, does not realize the party-goers are not actually his friends. They only like him because he is very wealthy. They start to spread rumors about his past and how he obtained his wealth. Through these actions Gatsby learns who he can trust.
Friendship is a hard thing to come by in “The Great Gatsby”. Gatsby has problems keeping friends due to his secretive nature. He is often taking mysterious phone calls and excusing himself from situations to do other things. Gatsby also refuses to reveal how he acquired enough money to build such a luxurious home and host massive parties without the blink of an eye. Gatsby soon learns that his “friends” are not truly there to be in his company but rather to snoop. He finds that only few people can be befriended.
As a result of his new discoveries about his “friends”, Gatsby learns how to live as a wealthy man. He does not trust many people by the time he dies. He also does not have many friends. I think he does the right thing in denying the friendship and trust of many people. He seems to live a happier life that way. I think if he would have found out about the troubles of the “American Dream” he never would have asked his dad to support him.
Gatsby’s story has a sad ending but the message is clear. Money can not buy you happiness. The money which Gatsby has only makes his life worse. By the end, Gatsby is an unhappy man. He finally realizes that his money does not mean anything to him since he does not have anyone to share it his belongings with. Gatsby learns too late that money can not buy happiness.

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Revised Text:

There is an old cliché that says: Money cannot buy happiness. Fitzgerald uses this saying as the theme of his book,“The Great Gatsby”. In the book, Gatsby learns the validity of that cliché the hard way. Gatsby is challenged mentally in his quest for happiness. He learns who to trust, who to befriend, and ultimately how to live as a wealthy man in this time period.

Gatsby is introduced as a wealthy man who throws lavish parties and has a large number of friends. Gatsby, though, does not realize the party-goers are not actually his friends. They only like him because he is very wealthy. They start to spread rumors about his past and how he obtained his wealth. Through these actions Gatsby learns who he can trust.

Friendship is a hard thing to come by in “The Great Gatsby”. Gatsby has problems keeping friends due to his secretive nature. He is often taking mysterious phone calls and excusing himself from situations to do other things. Gatsby also refuses to reveal how he acquired enough money to build such a luxurious home and host massive parties without blinking an eye.

Gatsby soon learns that his “friends” are not truly there to be in his company, but rather to snoop. He finds that only a few people can be befriended.

As a result of his new discoveries about his “friends”, Gatsby learns how to live as a wealthy man. He does not trust many people by the time he dies. He also does not have many friends.

I think he does the right thing in denying the friendship and trust of many people. He seems to live a happier life that way. I think if he would have found out about the troubles of the “American Dream” he never would have asked his dad to support him.

Gatsby’s story has a sad ending, but the message is clear. Money cannot buy you happiness. The money which Gatsby has only makes his life worse. By the end, Gatsby is an unhappy man. He finally realizes that his money does not mean anything to him since he does not have anyone to share his belongings with. Gatsby learns too late that money cannot buy happiness.

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