My favorite room in my home is my bedroom.

by Auey
(Thailand)

Original Text:


My favorite room in my home is my bedroom. It is my special place in the home. I am always delightful and feel free when I do activities in my lovely bedroom, such as reading a book, watching movie and sleeping. My bedroom is just a small room. Although it is small, I am happy because I can design and decorate this pretty bedroom by myself. I admire vintage pattern so that is the theme. Walls are white which is painted small colorful flowers on edge. The curtains are pink cottons with flower designs. The furniture is all white wood. My bed is white wood also and my bedroom is full of teddy bears. Every time I go to my room, the first thing I see is my teddy bears doted around the room. Whenever I feel lonely, I usually look at these teddies and then that feeling will clear away. In addition, I can see the drama comfortably in my room as I do not concern that somebody will turn over the channel I am seeing. Moreover, when I am not interested in seeing television, I like to read a good book in my room like a fairy tale and a drama. Especially, reading a book for final test on my white couch, I can remember accurately. I enjoy spending time in my room. It is the most favorite place to be.

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Revised Text:

My favorite room in my home is my bedroom. It is my special place in the home. I am always delighted and feel free when I do activities in my lovely bedroom, such as reading a book, watching a movie or sleeping.

My bedroom is just a small room. Although it is small, I am happy because I can design and decorate this pretty bedroom by myself. I admire vintage patterns, so that is the theme. The walls are white with small, colorful flowers painted on edges. The curtains are pink cotton with flower designs. The furniture is all white wood and my bed is white wood also.

My bedroom is full of teddy bears. Every time I go to my room, the first thing I see is my teddy bears dotted around the room. Whenever I feel lonely, I look at these teddies and that feeling will clear away.

In addition, I can watch dramas comfortably in my room, as I do not worry that somebody will change the channel I am watching. When I am not interested in seeing television, I like to read a good book in my room, like a fairy tale or a drama. When I read a book for a final test on my white couch, I can remember it especially accurately.

I enjoy spending time in my room, it is my most favorite place to be.

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