My pets are just like my children.

Original Text: My pets are just like my children.


I have two cats that are just like my children tutu and baby I have had tutu since she was about four weeks old and I have had baby since she was like five weeks old .
Tutu is a all black cat and baby is striped and beautiful I don’t know what kind of cats they are their nose is rather big and eye's set up . But both of them are just like my kids . Since I 'be had them they follow me and stay stuck up under me like little children . My children are grown and in a different state except for one she is seventeen and lives with me ,And she baby's them just as much as I do.
My cats only eat special food and cry when they want to eat and will come and get me when they want me to turn the water on in the sink so they can have a drink of water. Tu Tu is beautiful her hair is silky and shiny and she is very territorial and does not like people that comes in the house that she does not know. Baby is the opposite her hair is very unusual and distinctive stripes and very laid back she is always crying she cry's for her food she cry's when she wants to kiss you she cry's for everything that's why I named her baby. I treat them just like my children they have clothes that I have bought them raincoats ,winter hats and other things I have bought them that’s how special they are to me
These cats are just like my children I could not see not having them in my life they are just like my kids they are so special to me and I love them to death they make my life so much fuller I could not see myself ever being with out them they are my little kids.

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I have two cats that are just like my children, Tu Tu and Baby. I have had Tu Tu since she was about four weeks old, and I have had Baby since she was about five weeks old.

Tu Tu is an all black cat and Baby is striped and beautiful. I don’t know what kind of cats they are, their noses are rather big and their eyes set up, but both of them are just like my kids.

Since I've had them, they follow me and stay stuck up under me like little children. My children are grown and in a different state, except for one who is seventeen and lives with me. She babies them just as much as I do.

My cats only eat special food, and cry when they want to eat. They will come and get me when they want me to turn the water on in the sink so they can have a drink of water. Tu Tu is beautiful, her hair is silky and shiny and she is very territorial. She does not like people she doesn't know who come into the house. Baby is the opposite. Her fur is very unusual with distinctive stripes and is very laid back. She is always crying; she cries for her food, she cries when she wants to kiss you, she cries for everything. That's why I named her baby.

I treat them just like my children. They have clothes that I have bought them; raincoats, winter hats, and other things. That’s how special they are to me.

These cats are just like my children. I could not see not having them in my life, they are just like my kids. They are very special to me and I love them to death. They make my life so much fuller that I could not see myself ever being without them. They are my little kids.

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