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by Ornela
(Drexel Hill, PA)

Original Text: Opening Oaragraph


Going to school give to us the opportunity to know a lot of people, as a students, teachers and other persons who work in this huge institution. In high school in my country, Albania in 4 years I had 3 different history’s teachers: Genti, who loved his job like no other, Gjergji who was a funny teacher perhaps even by his young age, and the last one Ladi who hated his work

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Revised Text:

Going to school gives us the opportunity to know many people; as students, teachers and others who work in this huge institution. In high school in my country, Albania, I have had 3 different history teachers in 4 years: Genti, who loved his job like no other; Gjergji who was a funny teacher, perhaps even since he was young; and the last one, Ladi, who hated his work.


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