Par Fore

by Amanda Wilson
(Sault Ste Marie, Ontario)

Original Text: Par Fore


Dear Member:

Based on our outgoing efforts to make golf at Ohio River Golf Club more enjoyable for all players, the golf association at Ohio River Golf Club intends to implement a program that we feel will contribute to this end result.

Our golf course has been evaluated, and it is felt that the average player should be able to play the Ohio River Golf Club course in 4 hours or less. This evaluation was based on the course layout, difficulty of holes, distance between holes, etc. Currently, out time, on average, is slightly over 4 hours, which is not far off target. Unfortunately, there are days when part of the field is finished in 4 hours and others are closer to 5 hours. It would appear that these delays are caused by slow players who are unaware of the problems they create or are inconsiderate of their fellow members. We would like to improve this condition of slow play for the betterment of all members by introducing the following procedures.

The Ohio River Golf Club owners have agreed to pay a ranger who will report directly to a committee of selected members from the Ohio River Golf Club Association. The ranger, along with committee members, will try to better identify where flow problems develop as well as other possible reasons for slow play. We will have an ongoing program in which informative tapes will be shown on WPKR. These tapes will be supplied by the USGA and will focus on golf etiquette, course management, etc. we have many new golfers who might benefit from this instruction, along with more experienced golfers who might gain from a refresher course.

Important to this program is Mr. John Johnson, who was interviewed and hired by Ohio River Golf Club to function as ranger. John has had experience at other clubs and comes highly recommended by his previous employer. He was responsible for assisting play in courteous, diplomatic, conductive manner which should benefit us all. Please meet and greet John when he assumes his responsibilities in the near future.

Remember, please, that this is a collective, constructive effort to make out golfing experience more enjoyable for all and not an effort to embarrass the slow players. We hope this program will be educational for all of us in indentifying areas in which each of us might improve our games. Overall, this program will contribute to the targeted 4-hour round we can all enjoy.

We have included a copy of selected paged from the Golf Volunteer’s Handbook, Which you might find interesting. It would appear we are not alone in out slow play dilemma. We have supplied John Johnson with the complete booklet as a guide line for his activities.

We would appreciate your help and cooperation in implementing this effort, and if you have any thoughts as to how it might be improved, contact your Ohio River Golf Club Association Board or the Ohio River Golf Club Pro Shop.

Thank you!

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Revised Text:

Dear Members:

As part of our outgoing efforts to make golf at Ohio River Golf Club more enjoyable for all players, the Golf Association of the Club will implement a program that we feel will contribute to this.

Our golf course has been evaluated, and we believe that the average player should be able to play the course in 4 hours or less. This evaluation was based on; the course layout, difficulty of holes, distance between holes, etc. Currently, our time is slightly over 4 hours on average, which is not far off target.

Unfortunately, there are days when part of the field is finished in 4 hours and others take closer to 5 hours. It would appear that these delays are caused by slow players who are unaware of the problems they create or are inconsiderate of their fellow members. We would like to improve this condition of slow play for the betterment of all members by introducing the following procedures.

The Ohio River Golf Club owners have agreed to pay a ranger who will report directly to a committee of selected members from the Club Association. The ranger, along with committee members, will try to identify where flow problems develop, as well as other possible reasons for slow play.

We will have an ongoing program in which informative tapes will be shown on WPKR. These tapes will be supplied by the USGA and will focus on golf etiquette, course management, etc. We have many new golfers who might benefit from this instruction, along with more experienced golfers who might benefit from a refresher course.

An important part of this program is Mr. John Johnson, who was interviewed and hired by Ohio River Golf Club to function as Ranger. John has had experience at other clubs and comes highly recommended by his previous employer. He was responsible for assisting play in a courteous, diplomatic and conductive manner, which should benefit us all. Please meet and greet John when he assumes his responsibilities in the near future.

Remember please, that this is a collective, constructive effort to make our golfing experience more enjoyable for all and not an effort to embarrass the slow players. We hope this program will be educational for all of us in identifying areas in which each of us might improve our game. Overall, this program will contribute to the targeted 4-hour round which we can all enjoy.

We have included a copy of selected pages from the Golf Volunteer’s Handbook, which you might find interesting. It would appear we are not alone in ou slow play dilemma. We have supplied John Johnson with the complete booklet as a guideline for his activities.

We would appreciate your help and cooperation in implementing this effort, and if you have any thoughts as to how it might be improved, contact your Ohio River Golf Club Association Board or the Pro Shop.

Thank you!


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