Refusal letter expelling a child from my day care for his behavior

by Anna
(Yonkers, NY, USA)

Original Text: Refusal letter expelling a child from my day care for his behavior.


Dear Mr. and Mrs Xxxxxx:

Thank you for your interest and dedication with Tiny Tots Day Care Service. Eight years ago, I have opened Tiny Tots Day Care with six children, and It has grown to a capacity of 65 children. Its reputation is advancing that there is a waiting list of 78 children to attend.

Despite the several conferences, we had about the concerns with Brett, Tiny Tots Day Care staff had observed no improvement in his behavior. Since Brett Xxxxxx had entered Tiny Tots Day Care, things haven't been the same. He is enabling to get along with other children and teachers as well. In two months at Tiny Tots, he has bitten six children (causing one child to require stitches); kicked a teacher; and regularly scratched, hit, and pulled hair. Unfortunately, that type of behavior is not acceptable and Tiny Tots cannot tolerate such behavior to continue. The staff and parents are concerns with the safety of the children. Therefore, to inform you that within three days Brett Xxxxxx will be expelling from this Day until his behavior is change.

I hope you can understand the concerns of the other parents and the policy of Tiny Tots. My records have shown that Brad is your only child, enclosed is a list of Day Care in your area and near your job. After considerable thought, I have decided to accept Brett in the future, if and only if, his behavior is improved. As of this moment, on the behalf of Tiny Tots Day Care and Myself, we wish you the best of luck.

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Revised Text:

Dear Mr. and Mrs Xxxxxx:

Thank you for your interest in and dedication to Tiny Tots Day Care Service. Eight years ago, I opened Tiny Tots Day Care with six children, and It has grown to a capacity of 65 children. Our reputation has advanced to where there is now a waiting list of 78 children to attend.

Despite our several conferences about concerns with Brett, Tiny Tots Day Care staff have observed no improvement in his behavior. Since Brett Xxxxxx entered Tiny Tots Day Care, things haven't been the same. He is unable to get along with other children, and teachers as well. In two months at Tiny Tots; he has bitten six children (causing one child to require stitches), kicked a teacher, and regularly scratched, hit, and pulled hair. Unfortunately, this type of behavior is not acceptable and Tiny Tots cannot tolerate the behavior continuing. Staff and parents are concerned with the safety of the children.

Therefore, we must inform you that within three days from today, Brett Xxxxxx will be expelled until his behavior has changed.

I hope you can understand the concerns of the other parents and the policy of Tiny Tots.

Enclosed is a list of Day Care providers in your area and near your job. After considerable thought, I have decided to accept Brett in the future, if and only if, his behavior is improved. For Tiny Tots Day Care and Myself, we wish you the best of luck.

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