Sentences

by Hina Habib
(Pakistan)

Original Text: Sentences


The map on the right show the severity of this problem and requires our deep concern about how much effort we need to bring into treat available water to put into drinking use.

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Revised Text:

The map on the right shows the severity of this problem and requires our deep concern over how much effort we need expend to bring in and treat available water, to put into drinking use.

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