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Silent Wedding

by Aygun Samedova
(Baku)

Original Text: Silent Wedding

Two young lovers decide to get married but the ceremony is interrupted by communist party officials. The officials notify the citizens that Joseph Stalin has died and there will be a mandatory period of commemoration in remembrance of the great leader. Although the town’s people regard the distant authorities as self-centered power mongers they have no choice but to comply. But unwilling to completely bow, they adapt by having a silent wedding that is played out with all the farcical pratfalls of a fine mime production. Finally unable to contain themselves as the mood overtakes them the celebrants throw off their chains in loud celebration setting up the final conflict with the authorities.

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Revised Text:

Two young lovers decide to get married, but the ceremony is interrupted by communist party officials. The officials notify the citizens that Joseph Stalin has died and there will be a mandatory period of commemoration in remembrance of the great leader.

Although the town’s people regard the distant authorities as self-centered power mongers, they have no choice but to comply. But unwilling to completely bow, they adapt by having a silent wedding that is played out with all the farcical pratfalls of a fine mime production. Finally, unable to contain themselves as the mood overtakes them, the celebrants throw off their chains in loud celebration, setting up the final conflict with the authorities.

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