Sports Event

by Yosef
(Doha, Qatar)

Original Text: Sports Event


Doha sport team has won a various outstanding prizes during the 9th Al Khor Marathon on the 26th of March 2011 which was arranged by Al Khor Community. 1st place for the 5km men’s run, 2nd place for the 10km woman’s run, as well as 1st place for the veterans woman’s run. They have always been trying to encourage children and parents to live a healthy life, pleased to be a part of the mission with MOH (Ministry Of Health) healthy living.

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Revised Text:

The Doha Sport Team has won several outstanding prizes at the 9th Al Khor Marathon, held on the 26th of March, 2011. The marathon was arranged by Al Khor Community.

Prizes include; first place for the Men's 5 km Run, 2nd place for the Women’s 10 km Run, as well as 1st place in the Veteran Women’s Run.

The Team wants to encourage children and parents to live a healthy life, and is pleased to be a part of the mission of the MOH (Ministry Of Health) for healthy living.


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