Student Ambassador Essay

by Michelle
(NY)

Original Text: Student Ambassador Essay

What makes a Student Ambassador is the ability to listen to the needs and desire of the students, to organize forums about issues, and to become a role model to the students.
The reasons I want to become a Student Ambassador is because I want to gain more confidence and want to meet new people. Being a Student Ambassador means that you will represent the school at different events. I really enjoy coming to school and love coming here everyday, and it would be nice to be a part of something that I love.

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Revised Text:

What makes a good Student Ambassador, is the ability to listen to the needs and desires of others, to organize forums about issues, and to become a role model to the students.

The reason I want to become a Student Ambassador is because I want to gain more confidence, and want to meet new people. Being a Student Ambassador means that you will represent the school at different events. I really enjoy coming to school, and love coming here everyday. It would be nice to be a part of something that I love.

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