Talented people

by Alenoosh
(Isfahan-Iran)

Original Text:


It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.

I am totally agree with the first part of the statement; people are born with the different talents. Some are good at sports, the others are good at in another thing. In the history of our human beings life, there have been the countless talented people, whom their talents were obvious of the time people and now. F.g., Michel Jordan, a considerable fame sports man in recent years, in sport span. And Mozart, fabulous in music world, is another example. Mozart and Jordan are a few examples of endowed people. However, we have another example whom, their fist span of the life, were not only considered as an ungifted, but a silly person, F.g., Albert Einstein.

On the contrary, teaching, learning and practicing are the crucial things for doing the best that can not be ignored form the sight of view. Having a good teacher, on one hand, great deal of efforts on the other hand, can lead to success. Edison, the world great inventor in electricity, who was in the list of unscholarly person in the past, was being taught by his mother. Not having this dedicated mother could Edison go forward to reach where he was? Or, perhaps the question can be asked the other way, Edison 's mother could help his son if he did not have the special talent for learning?

To sum up, natural talent is like the prolific soil which can hold and nurture the seed in it when the harvest time reaches. While the acrid and barren area is more like the untalented brain which any farmers, high-techs can not foster it to harvest the sweet and delicious fruits.

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Revised Text:

It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.

I totally agree with the first part of the statement; people are born with different talents. Some are good at sports and others are good at another thing. In the history of human beings, there have been countless talented people, of whom their talents were obvious to the people of their time as well as now. For examples, Michael Jordan, a considerably famous sportsman of recent years, and Mozart, fabulous in the music world.

Mozart and Jordan are two examples of endowed people. However, we have another example who early in his life was not only considered un-gifted, but a silly person; Albert Einstein.

On the contrary, that teaching, learning and practicing are the crucial things for becoming the best can not be ignored. Having a good teacher on the one hand, and a great deal of effort on the other, can lead to success.

Edison, the world's greatest inventor in electricity, on the list of un-scholarly people in the past, was taught by his mother.

Not having this dedicated mother, could Edison have gone forward to reach what he did? Or perhaps the question can be asked the other way, could Edison's mother have helped her son if he did not have the special talent for learning?

To sum up, natural talent is like prolific soil which can hold and nurture the seed in it until the harvest time comes. While the acrid and barren area is more like the untalented brain that farmers can not foster to harvest the sweet and delicious fruits.

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Thank you for ''Talented People" editing.
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Hello Dear,
Thank you for editing. It was great without changing the intended meaning. I will post another essay. I like your editing. Your job inspires me to post more, here.

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