The Field 10

by Glenn Gillis
(Lévis Quebec Canada)

Original Text: The Field 10


After dropping out of school, both couples finely found equitable apartments. Their parents were very displeased with the idea, but after numerous arguments, they finely gave in.
Two years later, both couples were married, but contrary to Elizabeth and Alan, they got married at the town hall. It was cheaper and just as legitimate. But Elizabeth had a deferent opinion about marriage and so did her parents. She would never think of getting married at a courthouse, it was considered a disgrace to her, but mostly to her family. To Elizabeth’s family, it was everything or nothing period. Money was no problem for the wedding, for the Carters were wealthy people.
Today Jessie works for a construction company. After a few years of trade courses in mechanics, Hubert is now working for (TEXACO) garage down Main Street. Alan Beaudion is always doing his best to please Elizabeth.

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Revised Text:

After dropping out of school, both couples finally found acceptable apartments. The parents were very displeased with the idea, but after numerous arguments, they finely gave in.

Two years later, both couples were married, but contrary to Elizabeth and Alan's wishes, they were married at the town hall. It was cheaper and just as legitimate.

Elizabeth had a different opinion about marriage, and so did her parents. She would never think of getting married at a courthouse, it was a disgrace to her, and more to her family. To Elizabeth’s family, it was everything or nothing, period. Money was no problem for the wedding, the Carters were wealthy people.

Today Jessie works for a construction company. After a few years of trade courses in mechanics, Hubert is now working for the Texaco garage down on Main Street.

Alan Beaudion is always doing his best to please Elizabeth.

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