The Field 12

by Glenn Gillis
(LĂ©vis Quebec Canada)

Original Text: The Field 12


of his passionate love for her.
Normand takes another glance to the edge of the woods, but nothing. He decides its unimportant and just carries on with what he was doing. After a little while, Normand touches something in the sand, he pulls it out and the children look at it with awe. It seems to be a small triangular object.
The side of the small triangular object is a very bright red, the center of it is a light blue which for some strange reason begins to flash and glimmer.

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Revised Text:

of his passionate love for her.

Normand took another glance at the edge of the woods, but saw nothing. He decided it was unimportant, and just carried on with what he was doing. After a little while, Normand touched something in the sand, pulled it out, and the children looked at it with awe. It was a small triangular object.

One side of the object was a very bright red, the center of it a light blue, which for some strange reason began to flash and glimmer.

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