The Field 9

by Glenn Gillis
(Lévis Quebec Canada)

Original Text: The Field 9


Jennifer and Helen look at each other with a slight grin.
“I wonder if the snob brought along some beer,” asked Jennifer with a chuckle.
Helen couldn’t help herself but laugh.
“Definitely not” she replies.
Helen and Jennifer got along together very well, as if they were sisters. In the early seventies, they hung around with “the cool gang.” They both dropped out of school before the twelfth grade and eloped with two of the coolest duds around. One was a musician and so was the other. Just about everyone of their generation new who Hubert Chassé and Jessie Cardinal were. Jessie and Hubert were only two of the six members that played in one of the best jazz bands around. Many girls tried their chances with them in the passed but without success. There were only two girls that attracted their attention and they considered them to be the prettiest around.

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Revised Text:

Jennifer and Helen looked at each other, each with a slight grin.

“I wonder if the snob brought along some beer?” asked Jennifer with a chuckle.

Helen couldn’t help but laugh. “Definitely not.” she replied.

Helen and Jennifer got along very well together, as if they were sisters. In the early seventies, they had hung around with “the cool gang.” They both dropped out of school before the twelfth grade, and eloped with two of the coolest dudes around. Both men were musicians.

Just about everyone of their generation knew who Hubert Chassé and Jessie Cardinal were. Jessie and Hubert were two of the six members that played in one of the best jazz bands around. Many girls had tried their luck with them in the past, but without success. There were only two girls who attracted the men's attention, and they considered the girls to be the prettiest around.

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