To all my friends

by Lupe
(Vancouver, WA)

Original Text: To all my friends


I would like to let you know that my recovery has been very slow but I'm getting better. Although, there still are some struggles that my body is going through due to my anemia status. This coming Thursday, I will be seeing my doctor; I really hope she can do more than just waiting for the medication that she has me on kick in and solve the problem. I think I have had a fair amount (years wise) of pain and horrible disconferd. Well, dear friends and Image family, it is not my intention to close this note by leaving you feeling sorry about my situation. No, this is not my intention, I just want for all of you to know that it is going to take me at least three weeks before I can really connect back with all of you, (lately I have not been myself) I'm a big crying baby when it come to physical pain. I miss all of you and our children. I would like to take this opportunity to say thank you for showing me your love, prayers, and thoughtfulness before and after my operation. Don't forget to keep me in your minds during those quiet moments of praise in the presence of our creator.

With all my love and appreciation.

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Revised Text:

I would like to let you know that my recovery has been very slow but I'm getting better, although there are still some struggles my body is going through due to my anemia.

This coming Thursday I will be seeing my doctor and I really hope she can do more than just waiting for the medication she has me on to kick in and solve the problem. I think I have had a fair amount (years wise) of pain and horrible discomfort.

Well, dear friends and Image family, it is not my intention to close this note by leaving you feeling sorry about my situation. No, that is not my intention, I just want all of you to know that it is going to take me at least three weeks before I can really connect back with all of you. Lately I have not been myself, I'm a big cry-baby when it come to physical pain.

I miss all of you and our children. I would like to take this opportunity to say thank you for your love, prayers, and thoughtfulness before and after my operation. Don't forget to keep me in your minds during those quiet moments of praise in the presence of our creator.

With all my love and appreciation.

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