Wealthy Countries And Poor Countries

Original Text: Wealthy Countries And Poor Countries


Today that people in wealthy countries are curious to help people in poor countries. This can be seen especially in the news when poor nations confront huge natural disasters such as flood and drought. It is believed the governers of rich nations can make the development process of poor nations more easily. This will be shown by considering the role of rich governments and human rights.
Firstly, the governers of rich nations play an important role in development process. To illustrate, they provide job opportunity for unemployed people in poor nations.It is obvious that these improvements would not happen without the help of rich nations.
Secondly, we all live on the same planet and we are all connected to each other. By the way of example, some teachers travel to poor nations on their own. When looking at this example there is no doubt that people who are living in wealthy countries try to participate in the development of poor nations.
Following the analyzing of these, it can be seen that development in poorer countries is become more easily by the help of rich nations. As has been proven both improvement and help of rich nations is necessary for development.

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Revised Text:

Today, people in wealthy countries are willing to help people in poor countries. This can be seen especially in the news, when poor nations confront huge natural disasters such as floods or drought. It is believed that the leaders of rich nations can make the development process of poor nations easier. This will be shown by considering the role of rich governments and human rights.

First, the leaders of rich nations play an important role in the development process. To illustrate, they provide job opportunities for unemployed people in poor nations. It is obvious that these improvements would not happen without the help of rich nations.

Secondly, we all live on the same planet and we are all connected to each other. By way of example, some teachers travel to poor nations on their own. When looking at this example there is no doubt that people who are living in wealthy countries try to participate in the development of poor nations.

Following this analysis, it can be seen that development in poorer countries has become easier with the help of rich nations. As has been proven, both improvements and the help of rich nations is necessary for development.

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