Yuri's Day -The Road to the Stars

by Liudmila
(Chishinev, Republic of Moldova)

Original Text:


The 12 April is a special day in Human’s history. On that day in 1961, Russian cosmonaut Yuri Gagarin made a 108-minute orbital flight in his Vostok 1 spacecraft. His famous phrase “Poyehali!” ( Up we Go!) became the first words uttered in outer space. His call sign was KEDR ( cedar in Russian).When he saw the Earth from the orbit he said : ‘The Earth is blue. It is amazing !’.
It was real miracle and all newspapers wrote about this grand affair.
Fortunately the flight went successfully. Yuri Gagarin became the first human to travel into space. Right after landing the cosmonaut was driven to the meeting with Nikita Khrushchev. And the next day Yuri Gagarin was standing in front of the Red Square with the most high-ranking capital inhabitants. Here he was greeting a crowd of people who came with posters and pictures of the cosmonaut. He smiled probably not understanding yet that he had already become the most famous person on the planet at 27 age.
Gagarin’s smile remains symbol of space exploration era for 50 years. Yuri Gagarin became a legend while alive.
April 12, 2011 will mark the 50-th anniversary of the great breakthrough for the humankind - the first manned space flight.
On March 9, web surfers took part in a special stage of the Gagarin Cup, which was about the Russian language. The project is dedicated to the 50th anniversary of the great historic flight. Thousands of people from Russia and other countries participated in the project initiated by the Russian Union of Journalists, the International Confederation of Journalist Unions and the administration of Russia’s Star City space training center. Among the winners were Svetlana Roberts from Manchester, Vadim Zakharov from Kiev and Natalia Kovtun from Stockholm . Participants were welcome to visit xxxxxxx and compile a Russian word from a set of letters scattered on a virtual board. They also could learn many interesting facts related to Yuri Gagarin’s life and flight.

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Revised Text:

The 12th of April is a special day in Human history. On that day in 1961, Russian cosmonaut Yuri Gagarin made a 108 minute orbital flight in his Vostok 1 spacecraft. His famous phrase, “Poyehali!” (Up we Go!) became the first words uttered in outer space. His radio call sign was "KEDR" (cedar in Russian). When he saw the Earth from the orbit he said, "The Earth is blue. It is amazing!" The flight was a real miracle, and all the newspapers wrote about this grand affair.

Fortunately the flight went successfully and Yuri Gagarin became the first human to travel into space. Right after landing, the cosmonaut was driven to a meeting with Nikita Khrushchev, and the next day Gagarin was standing in front of Red Square with the most high-ranking capital inhabitants. Here he greeted a crowd of people, who came with posters and pictures of the cosmonaut. He smiled, probably not understanding yet that he had already become the most famous person on the planet at the age of 27
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Gagarin’s smile remained a symbol of the space exploration era for 50 years. He became a legend while still alive. April 12, 2011 will mark the 50th anniversary of the great breakthrough for humankind; the first manned space flight.

On March 9th, web surfers took part in a special stage of the Gagarin Cup, which was about the Russian language. The project is dedicated to the 50th anniversary of the great historic flight. Thousands of people from Russia and other countries participated in the project, initiated by the Russian Union of Journalists, the International Confederation of Journalist Unions and the administration of Russia’s Star City space training center. Among the winners were Svetlana Roberts from Manchester, Vadim Zakharov from Kiev and Natalia Kovtun from Stockholm.

Participants in the Gagarin Cup were welcome to visit xxxxxxx and compile a Russian word from a set of letters scattered on a virtual board. They could also learn many interesting facts related to Yuri Gagarin’s life and flight.


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