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In my opinion, food and restaurant industries should not be held liable for the rise of obesity. Obesity is the result of poor self-control; consumers should take responsibility for their actions. “The lawsuit alleged that the fast-food giant had “negligently, recklessly, carelessly, and/or intentionally” marketed products to children” (Lawrence & Weber, 2011, p.359). In this case who is purchasing the food for the children? The parents and they should already know the consequences of eating too much McDonald’s food that is high in fat, salt and sugar. They have the authority to choose if their children eat healthy or unhealthy. The food and restaurant industries don’t force anyone to eat the food they offer. Obesity is a choice and only the person making that choice should be held responsible for what they eat. Everyone know hamburger and french-fries are greasy fatting foods. If you blame the restaurants they you should blame the manufacturers who supply the meat and potatoes, etc as well.
The best solution to the obesity epidemic is to take responsibility for yourself and what you eat. “The immediate cause for this epidemic of obesity was that people were simply eating too much” (Lawrence & Weber, 2011, p.360). The role that food and restaurant industries can play is to analyze their food with the negative ingredients and see if there are any possible solutions and or advertise the healthy food items or if they don’t have any introduce healthier items giving customers an option in choosing what they eat. “Americans consumed, on average, around 2,750 calories a day, well above the healthy amount for most people” (Lawrence & Weber, 2011, p.360). Individuals can limit the number of calories they eat per day in chances of improving their health. Regulators are already going overboard tighten regulations on food manufacturers in hopes of fighting childhood obesity. I think trial attorneys, do not play a role in the solution because obesity cases should not go to court. Government policymakers should continue to provide information about how to eat to live a healthy life.

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In my opinion, the food and restaurant industries should not be held liable for the rise of obesity. Obesity is the result of poor self-control, consumers should take responsibility for their actions.

“The lawsuit alleged that the fast-food giant had “negligently, recklessly, carelessly, and/or intentionally” marketed products to children” (Lawrence & Weber, 2011, p.359). In this case, who is purchasing the food for the children? The parents, and they should already know the consequences of eating too much McDonald’s food that is high in fat, salt and sugar. They have the authority to choose whether their children eat healthy or unhealthy.

The food and restaurant industries don’t force anyone to eat the food they offer. Obesity is a choice and only the person making that choice should be held responsible for what they eat. Everyone knows that hamburgers and french-fries are greasy fattening foods. If you blame the restaurants, you should blame the manufacturers who supply the meat and potatoes, etc. as well.

The best solution to the obesity epidemic is to take responsibility for yourself and what you eat. “The immediate cause for this epidemic of obesity was that people were simply eating too much” (Lawrence & Weber, 2011, p.360). The role that the food and restaurant industries can play is to analyze food with the negative ingredients and see if there are any possible solutions, and/or advertise the healthy food items. If they don’t have any, they should introduce healthier items, giving customers an option in choosing what they eat.

“Americans consumed, on average, around 2,750 calories a day, well above the healthy amount for most people” (Lawrence & Weber, 2011, p.360). Individuals can limit the number of calories they eat per day and improving their health.

Regulators are already going overboard tightening regulations on food manufacturers in hopes of fighting childhood obesity. I think trial attorneys should not play a role in the solution because obesity cases should not go to court. Government policymakers should continue to provide information on how to eat to live a healthy life.


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