Cover Letter

Original Text: Cover Letter


Your vacancy for the role of Administration Manager advertised on Jobcentre Plus on 26 of April
is of very much interest to me and I hereby attach my Curriculum Vitae for your consideration.

Most recently, I ran a busy Corporate Clients Department of a London premier private healthcare clinic with a prestigious portfolio of clients in diverse sector of activities from banking, law firms to oil and gas.

Throughout my career, I have utilised my leadership, planning, and managerial skills to consistently increase revenues, reduce costs, and drive customer satisfaction. As my CV demonstrates, I have the drive, track record of results and management experience that can contribute to your company’s growth.

• Turned around wide view, from a disorganised, severely unproductive function to a strong profit achiever sales and marketing department equipped with clear sales and account development strategies, sound working processes including product pricing, quotations guidelines, billing procedure, complaints procedure etc.
• Led initiative to focus on customer needs and service which drove sales of high margin (60%) by expanding the client’s portfolio from 20 to 52 companies.
• Revitalised regular client’s review meetings and reporting.
• Contract negotiation and drafting skills
My success is due, in part, to my ability to communicate with others. It has enabled me to harness the potential of all levels of team members and motivate them to achieve superior results. Furthermore, I am extremely hard-working, self motivated and a team player.
I am confident that my skills and personality present a pivotal platform for undertaking any demanding role. I would be delighted to have the opportunity to meet or speak with you to discuss this application further.
In any event, thank you for your time.

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Revised Text:

Your vacancy for the position of Administration Manager, advertised on Jobcentre Plus on the 26th of April is of very much interesting to me and I have attach my Curriculum Vitae for your consideration.

Most recently, I ran the busy Corporate Clients Department of a premier London private healthcare clinic, with a prestigious portfolio of clients in diverse sectors; from banking and law firms, to oil and gas.

Throughout my career, I have utilised my leadership, planning, and managerial skills to consistently increase revenues, reduce costs, and drive customer satisfaction. As my CV demonstrates, I have the drive, track record of results, and management experience that can contribute to your company’s growth.

• Turned around a disorganized, severely unproductive function, to a strong profit achieving sales and marketing department equipped with clear sales and account development strategies, sound working processes including product pricing, quotations guidelines, billing procedures, complaints procedures, etc.

• Led an initiative to focus on customer needs and service, which drove sales of high margin (60%) by expanding the client’s portfolio from 20 to 52 companies.

• Revitalised regular client review meetings and reporting.

• Contract negotiation and drafting skills.

My success is due, in part, to my ability to communicate with others. It has enabled me to harness the potential of all levels of team members and motivate them to achieve superior results. Furthermore, I am extremely hard-working, self motivated and a team player.

I am confident that my skills and personality present a pivotal platform for undertaking any demanding role. I would be delighted to have the opportunity to meet or speak with you to discuss this application further.

Thank you for your time.

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