Eating the Forbidden Fruit

by Keyasia

Original Text: Eating the Forbidden Fruit


Some people can be easily tricked or persuaded to do something, while others can be convinced through peer pressure. This is the case in John Milton’s epic poem Paradise Lost. In his effort to avenge against God, Satan used his wit to con Eve into eating from the forbidden tree. In the end, they both partake in eating the fruit from the forbidden tree that God specifically warned them of. There is a distinct reason as to why each partake in eating the fruit.
Satan himself was the one to persuade Eve. She was "his purposed pray" (416). He did it of guide, of hate, of envy, and of revenge (466). He began his plot by seducing Eve. He admires almost every aspect of her. He refers to her as "A goddess among Gods, adored and served by angles numberless thy daily train"(548). Eve is very impressed to hear this animal speak and have human sense (453-454).She questions him on how this came to be and this is how it all begins. He informs her it all happens with a bite of the fruit from a tree. To Eve, he served as a living testimony as what the fruit could do. Eve became very intrigued by this mysterious fruit and the powers it gives to the serpent. She then asks where this tree is. (617) After Satan leads her there, she remembers that this is the tree God forbid. Satan convinces her that God forbids the fruit only as a test of their independence. With the compliments, and the serpent as a living sacrifice with an enhanced mind she reasons that it is the fruit that she must eat. She then tries to convince Adam, as the snake did to her, to eat the fruit. She wanted them to be equal.
Adam does not need as much persuading as Eve does in order for him to disobey an order from God. He remembers what God said and what will happen if he ate the "sacred fruit"(904). He is certain she will die (903). The reality of him living without Eve is unbearable. He decided that without his love, Eve, life will be death (954). Adam came to the agreement that if she was to die, he was to follow because he did not want to be left alone without her. Adam was “fondly overcome with female charm (999). Although he wanted to stay and obey God, he wondered if it were even possible to do anyway.
Adam and Eve both ate the forbidden fruit, each of them had a different reason. Eve's motive for eating the fruit was mainly through persuasion. The serpent complimented Eve on her beauty and persuaded her that the fruit would make her powerful and give her a "higher degree of life" (934). She also was told that if the fruit was to be eaten, death would be the consequence. But after seeing the serpent (who claims to have eaten the fruit) still lives, she was convinced that eating the fruit was the right thing to do. Adam's act of eating the fruit was out of love. Adam was sure death was to fall upon Eve and he felt like he just could not live without her. The reasons were different, but their consequences were all the same which contributed to the fall of man.

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Revised Text:

Some people can be easily tricked or persuaded to do something, while others can be convinced through peer pressure. This is the case in John Milton’s epic poem Paradise Lost. In his effort to avenge against God, Satan used his wit to con Eve into eating from the forbidden tree. In the end, they both partake in eating the fruit from the forbidden tree that God specifically warned them of. There is a distinct reason as to why each partake in eating the fruit.

Satan himself was the one to persuade Eve. She was "his purposed pray" (416). He did it of guile, of hate, of envy, and of revenge (466). He began his plot by seducing Eve. He admires almost every aspect of her. He refers to her as "A goddess among Gods, adored and served by angles numberless thy daily train"(548). Eve is very impressed to hear this animal speak and have human sense (453-454).She questions him on how this came to be and this is how it all begins.

He informs her it all happens with a bite of the fruit from a tree. To Eve, he served as a living testimony as what the fruit could do. Eve became very intrigued by this mysterious fruit and the powers it gave to the serpent. She then asks where this tree is. (617) After Satan leads her there, she remembers that this is the tree God forbade. Satan convinces her that God forbids the fruit only as a test of their independence. With the compliments, and the serpent as a living sacrifice with an enhanced mind, she reasons that it is the fruit that she must eat. She then tried to convince Adam, as the snake did to her, to eat the fruit. She wanted them to be equal.

Adam did not need as much persuading as Eve did in order for him to disobey an order from God. He remembered what God said, and what would happen if he ate the "sacred fruit"(904). He was certain that she would die (903). The reality of him living without Eve was unbearable. He decided that without his love, Eve, life would be death (954). Adam came to the decision that if she were to die, he was to follow, because he did not want to be left alone without her. Adam was “fondly overcome with female charm (999). Although he wanted to stay and obey God, he wondered if it were even possible to do anyway.

Adam and Eve both ate the forbidden fruit, each of them had a different reason. Eve's motive for eating the fruit was mainly through persuasion. The serpent complimented Eve on her beauty and persuaded her that the fruit would make her powerful and give her a "higher degree of life" (934). She also was told that if the fruit was to be eaten, death would be the consequence, but after seeing that the serpent (who claimed to have eaten the fruit) still lived, she was convinced that eating the fruit was the right thing to do.

Adam's act of eating the fruit was out of love. Adam was sure death was to fall upon Eve and he felt like he just could not live without her.

The reasons were different, but the consequences were the same, which contributed to the fall of man.


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