Extracurriculars and Leadership

Original Text: Extracurriculars and Leadership


Ever since freshman year, when I first joined The Log, it has been my dream to become editor of our school newspaper. Each year, as I submitted my assigned articles, I quietly watched the upperclassmen editors mold and shape each new edition of The Log, learning the ins and outs of the printing process. Now it is my turn to follow in their footsteps and lead the newspaper through another successful year.
Because I am the editor, the Log incarnate so to speak, the quality of the school newspaper is also a reflection on myself. If I get a bad grade on a test or paper, that is kept between the teacher and myself. No one else has to know. But if the Log is published late and is full of grammatical errors, the whole student body knows that I have been failing at my job.
I am ashamed to admit that this year’s first edition was not up to its usual standards. In order to stop the descent down the slippery slope of apathy and procrastination, I called a meeting of Log staff members. When I stood in front of the group of peers, I realized that it was here and now that I needed to step up my authority. As I outlined the new policies on the permanence of deadlines and stressed the importance of following through on commitments, I saw guilt and contrition flash across the faces of the somber journalists. It was then that I really understood for the first time that they truly respected me, and that I possessed the strength to be a leader not only in name, but in essence as well.
This opportunity to be editor of The Log is a sneak peek into my future career. I have always known that I would thrive in the literary circle and now I have set my sights on a career as a copyeditor for a publishing company. My experience as Log editor has given me practice at editing others’ writing and combing over the entire newspaper for spelling mistakes and misplaced commas. This little taste of professional proofreading has only left me ravenous for future editorial escapades.
Writing is a passion for me; that is why I take my position as editor so seriously. It isn’t just some shiny title to fill out my résumé. Being editor of The Log has given me self-assurance and confidence while providing a creative outlet and practical experience in my future career, which is more than I have gained from any other extracurricular activity

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Revised Text:

Ever since my freshman year, when I first joined The Log, it has been my dream to become editor of our school newspaper. Each year, as I submitted my assigned articles, I quietly watched the upperclassmen editors mold and shape each new edition of The Log, learning the ins and outs of the printing process. Now it is my turn to follow in their footsteps and lead the newspaper through another successful year.

Because I am the editor, the Log incarnate so to speak, the quality of the school newspaper is also a reflection on myself. If I get a bad grade on a test or a paper, it is kept between the teacher and myself, no one else has to know. But if the Log is published late and is full of grammatical errors, the whole student body knows that I have been failing at my job.

I am ashamed to admit that this year’s first edition was not up to its usual standards. In order to stop a descent down the slippery slope of apathy and procrastination, I called a meeting of Log staff members. When I stood in front of the group of my peers, I realized that it was here and now that I needed to step up my responsibility. As I outlined the new policies on the permanence of deadlines and stressed the importance of following through on commitments, I saw guilt and contrition flash across the faces of the somber journalists. It was then that I really understood for the first time that they truly respected me, and that I possessed the strength to be a leader not only in name, but in essence as well.

This opportunity to be editor of The Log is a sneak peek into my future career. I have always known that I would thrive in the literary circle and now I have set my sights on a career as a copy-editor for a publishing company. My experience as Log editor has given me practice at editing others’ writing and combing over the entire newspaper for spelling mistakes and misplaced commas. This little taste of professional proofreading has only left me ravenous for future editorial escapades.

Writing is a passion for me; that is why I take my position as editor so seriously. It isn’t just some shiny title to fill out my resume. Being editor of The Log has given me self-assurance and confidence while providing a creative outlet and practical experience in my future career, which is more than I have gained from any other extracurricular activity

Editor:

1. Please review the text carefully to ensure your intended meaning was not mistakenly changed.

2. Before you leave this page, please take a moment to use the "Click here to post comments." link at the bottom of the page to rate the proofreading and leave a comment if you wish.


Proofreading and editing pages that receive ratings and comments are moved to the top of the list.

Click here to post comments

Return to Free English Editing and Proofreading Archive 2010.