From Fred

by Fred
(ENGLAND)

Original Text: From Fred


Hi Ken
It's been a very hot and humid here today we could of done with your BBQ today that roast lamb you do sounds delicious.
I only found out that my dad was born in America after his death I found a mini stars & stripes amongst his belongings which after making some enquires led me to Chicago and the record of his fathers death I even managed to get a copy of the coroners report
Our house is very small compared to your bungalow we we have neighbours either side and are overlooked from the back, but we are quite happy her although Ellen misses the gas cooker our place is all electric which is a bit of a bind.
Ken how did you end up in the RAAF is it a career you set your heart on at an early age?As for myself I only went to a secondary modern school and left at 15 with no qualifications but I managed to get work with the post office which I enjoyed unfortunately school for me was not an enjoyable experience.
Count Mayo is on the West Coast of Ireland we did book our flights to go there a couple of years ago but decided against going due to the euro making everything so expensive.
After quite a bit of investigation I did find the date my dads parents left for America and the ship they set sail on as for my grandfather he died from his injuries after falling from a building whilst working he was just 31.
If we had a nice win on the lottery we would like a nice large bungalow quite close to the sea so watch this space.
A couple of years ago you could buy a leg of lamb for £7.99p they now sell for between £17 and £24.
As you have quite cold winters and hot summer i assume that you must have central heating and air conditioning which must be quite expensive whatever time of the year.

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Hi Ken

It's been very hot and humid here today, we could of done with your BBQ today. That roast lamb you do sounds delicious.

I only found out that my dad was born in America after his death. I found a mini Stars & Stripes among his belongings, which after making some enquires, led me to Chicago and the record of his fathers death. I even managed to get a copy of the coroners report.

Our house is very small compared to your bungalow. We we have neighbours on either side and are overlooked from the back, but we are quite happy here although Ellen misses the gas cooker. Our place is all electric, which is a bit of a bind.

Ken, how did you end up in the RAAF? Is it a career you set your heart on at an early age? As for myself, I only went to a secondary modern school and left at 15 with no qualifications. I managed to get work with the post office, which I enjoyed. Unfortunately, school for me was not an enjoyable experience.

County Mayo is on the West Coast of Ireland. We booked flights to go there a couple of years ago but decided against going due to the euro making everything so expensive.

After quite a bit of investigation, I found the date my dad's parents left for America and the ship they set sail on. As for my grandfather, he died from his injuries after falling from a building while working. He was just 31.

If we had a nice win on the lottery, we would like a nice large bungalow, quite close to the sea, so watch this space.

A couple of years ago you could buy a leg of lamb for £7.99. One now sells for between £17 and £24.

As you have quite cold winters and hot summers, I assume that you must have central heating and air conditioning. It must be quite expensive whatever time of the year.

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