Jesus

by Aia
(SC)

Original Text: Jesus


The Bronze Bow is a story that deals with the main character, Daniel, overcoming his hatred. He hated the Romans because they killed his father. He wanted to destroy the Romans for what they did to his dad. He left his grandmother and troubled sister to go be with a band of outlaws in the mountains. He later came down from the mountains because his grandmother had died. His friend Simon wanted him to take over his blacksmith shop so he could go follow Jesus. This was shortly after his grandmother died. Daniel and his sister Leah moved into the blacksmith shop and settled in. Occasionally, a Roman soldier about Leah’s age would come into the shop asking for things to be repaired. The Roman soldier spotted Leah on one of his visits to the shop. When Daniel was away, he would come and talk to Leah.
One day, Leah said she had a present for Daniel. It was a basket of fruit. He was just sinking his teeth into a juicy, bright red pomegranate when he asked Leah where the fruit came from since she didn’t go out in public. She said the Roman solider named Marcus brought it to her. Instantly, as a reaction, Daniel hurtled the pomegranate furiously at the wall. Horrified, he stood up and yelled at Leah. He told her she was never to see this “Marcus” again. Leah was broken-hearted. She sat in the same spot for days and went under the weather with a deadly fever. Daniel was getting water for her one day when Marcus came up to him and asked to see Leah. He said he was going away, and probably wouldn’t be coming back. Daniel, in his haste, said no, and walked into his house. There, standing over Leah was Jesus, and he had healed her. Daniel went back out of his house and invited Marcus inside.
Jesus had become very famous during this time period, which is how he ended up in Daniel’s home to heal Leah. Jesus had become popular because he gave speeches. He was sometimes with fishermen. He healed the sick. He shared his food with the poor. He was wise, strong, loving, and calm. When Jesus traveled from town to town, he healed people. People came to him to be healed, and sometimes he went to them, as in Leah’s case. There is a story in the Bible where a girl is healed by Jesus. She had been possessed by demons. I think this story in the Bible is connected to Leah in The Bronze Bow. Based on my readings, the Jesus featured in the book seemed to be the Jesus described in the New Testament. Jesus’s personality, his teachings, and his miracles were consistent with the stories of him in both books.
In conclusion, Daniel did overcome his hatred of the Romans. After Leah was healed by Jesus, he realized that he didn’t need to hate all of the Romans, that there might be some out there that are honorable. The few times that Daniel had heard Jesus give speeches of love and grace finally got to him. Just as these lessons appealed to Daniel, they are wonderful and apply to our lives today.

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Revised Text:

The Bronze Bow is a story that deals with the main character, Daniel, overcoming his hatred. He hated the Romans because they killed his father and wanted to destroy the Romans for what they did to his dad. He left his grandmother and troubled sister to join a band of outlaws in the mountains but later came down from the mountains because his grandmother had died.

Daniel's friend Simon wanted him to take over his blacksmith shop so he could go follow Jesus. This was shortly after his grandmother died. Daniel and his sister Leah moved into the blacksmith shop and settled in. Occasionally, a Roman soldier, about Leah’s age, would come into the shop asking for things to be repaired. The Roman soldier spotted Leah on one of his visits to the shop and, when Daniel was away, he would come and talk to Leah.

One day, Leah said she had a present for Daniel. It was a basket of fruit. He was just sinking his teeth into a juicy, bright red pomegranate when he asked Leah where the fruit came from, since she didn’t go out in public. She said the Roman solider, named Marcus, had brought it to her.

Instantly, as a reaction, Daniel furiously hurtled the pomegranate at the wall. Horrified, he stood up and yelled at Leah. He told her she was never to see this “Marcus” again.

Leah was broken-hearted. She sat in the same spot for days and went under the weather with a deadly fever. Daniel was getting water for her one day when Marcus came up to him and asked to see Leah. He said he was going away, and probably wouldn’t be coming back. Daniel, in his haste, said no, and walked into his house. There, standing over Leah was Jesus. He had healed her. Daniel then went back out of his house and invited Marcus inside.

Jesus had become very famous by this time, which is how he ended up in Daniel’s home to heal Leah. Jesus had become popular because he gave speeches. He was sometimes with fishermen. He healed the sick. He shared his food with the poor. He was wise, strong, loving, and calm.

When Jesus traveled from town to town, he healed people. People came to him to be healed, and sometimes he went to them, as in Leah’s case. There is a story in the Bible where a girl is healed by Jesus. She had been possessed by demons. I think this story in the Bible is connected to Leah in The Bronze Bow.

Based on my readings, the Jesus featured in the book seemed to be the Jesus described in the New Testament. Jesus’s personality, his teachings, and his miracles were consistent with the stories of him in both books.

In conclusion, Daniel overcome his hatred of the Romans. After Leah was healed by Jesus, he realized that he didn’t need to hate all of the Romans, that there might be some out there that were honorable. The few times that Daniel had heard Jesus give speeches of love and grace had finally got to him. Just as these lessons appealed to Daniel, they are wonderful and apply to our lives today.

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