Letter

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Original Text:


My Letter

The Science Social School of Nutrition Award is a great match to my interests and background in Nutrition studies completed in high school. I see myself as a very social person with great curiosity about diets and nutrition. Keeping that in mind, I can say with certainty that the Nutrition program will help enhance my knowledge about food and healthy eating. My excellent leadership, communication and outgoing personality make me a perfect candidate for _____. I have experience with food and interacting with people from the volunteer work I had done at various events held at school, Fund raising events and social gatherings.

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Revised Text:

The Science Social School of Nutrition Award is a great match to my interests and background in Nutrtion studies completed in high school.

I see myself as a very social person with great curiosity about diets and nutrition. With that in mind, I can say with certainty that the Nutrition program will help enhance my knowledge of food and healthy eating.

My excellent leadership, communication and outgoing personality make me a perfect candidate for _____. I have experience with food and interacting with people from the volunteer work I have done at various events held at school, Fund raising events and social gatherings.

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