Marriage

by Fatemeh
(Mashhad, Iran)

Original Text: Marriage

If you want to got married at first you need to know a person who has at least initial condition for marriage with you. But if you do not know this person, you should better to ask from your family or your friend to introduced a person to you. Next you have to meet more and more to know him better. Then, it is better to consult with a counselor or with a person who has good experience at this matter. After that if you found you and him are suit to married together, ask your family to meet yours.
Notice family are very important and they play main role in your life spatially in traditional family. Finally if the families have a good vision with this marriage, you can engaged. I hope you be lucky .

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Revised Text:

If you want to got married, you first need to know a person who at least has the ability to marry you. If you do not know this person, you should ask your family or friends to introduce a person to you. Next, you need to meet with him many times to know him better. Then, it is best to consult with a counselor or with a person who has good experience at these matters. After this, if you have found that the two of you are suited to marry, ask your two families to meet.

Families are very important and they play a main role in your life, especially in traditional families. Finally, if the families have a good view of the marriage, you can get engaged. I hope you will be lucky.


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Jul 27, 2011
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the marriage
by: Suth.

You are welcome.
It was a good revision.

Jul 26, 2011
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to introduced?
by: Anonymous

Why "to introduced" or just an error ?

You are right, it was an error. Thanks for catching it.

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