My Cats

by Kimberly J. Starks
(Jonesboro)

My Babies

My Babies

Original Text: My Cats


I have two cats. One is named Tutu. She is a black cat, and she is very temperamental. She is the first cat that I got. She was so small she could sit on the palm of my hand, and the second cat's name is baby. She is always crying like a baby, and she likes to follow you all over the house
They are very important to me ,They are like my children they depend on me just like they are little kids I have to feed them and wash them and love them. When they were kittens and I had just got them I had to bottle feed them with kitten formula .Now that my Kids are grown, And I don't have my grand kids around they take up that void in my heart I have since I don't have my girls around, And I don't have my grandsons around and when I'm having a bad day weather its stress or I'm sick when they come and love me I know everything will be alright.So I think my cats are just like my kids and they fill the void in my heart and if I didn't have them around I would have a big problem with missing my grand kids and loneliness

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Revised Text:

I have two cats. One is named Tutu, she is a black cat and is very temperamental. She is the first cat that I got. She was so small she could sit on the palm of my hand. The second cat's name is Baby. She is always crying like a baby, and she likes to follow you all over the house.

They are very important to me and are like my children. They depend on me just like they were little kids. I have to feed them and wash them and love them. When they were kittens, and I had just got them, I had to bottle feed them with kitten formula.

Now that my kids are grown, and when I don't have my grand-kids around, my cats fill the void in my heart I have since I don't have my girls here. When I don't have my grandsons around, and when I'm having a bad day, whether its stress or I'm sick, when the cats come and love me, I know everything will be alright. So, I think my cats are just like my kids. They fill the void in my heart, and if I didn't have them around I would have a big problem with loneliness and missing my grand-kids.

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