Past vs Present

by Shameka

Original Text:

thoreau said "the mass of men lead lives of quiet desperation"(P.43. Mr.todd clearly agrees with Thoreau. Mr.Todd is an old fashion man. He wants a simple basic life. Mr.Todd feels life is too complex. He believes technology is taking over, and its not improving his life.


work citied
Todd Richard
new and improved? Not necessarily
newsweek magazine july 30, 2001(p.15)

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Revised Text:

Thoreau said, "The mass of men lead lives of quiet desperation" (P.43). Mr. Todd is an old fashioned man and clearly agrees with Thoreau. He wants a simple, basic life. Mr.Todd feels life is too complex, he believes technology is taking over, and its not improving his life.


Work cited:
Todd Richard
New and improved? Not necessarily.
Newsweek Magazine, July 30, 2001 (p.15)

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