PPlan

Original Text: PPlan


Hi CXC,
I reviewed the delivery process with the team, after the last incident. Since then, we stopped asking the customer to place a work order with PP concerning the packages that are over 50lbs. For this particular situation, Tarik Mahrour, (ex: 8023) contacted Physical Plan directly, assuming that the same policy was in placed. During my conversation with Tarik he stated: “Ralph, this is how I have been doing it since I started working at Berklee".
Going forward, I ask Bruno and the rest of the staff, to inform any customer who receives packages over 50 lb, to get in touch with us first before contacting Physical Plan.
I want to take advantage to let you know also that the only conversation that I had with a customer about physical, a few days ago, was about some packages that need to be delivered to a location where only physical plan get the key to access that storage room. The customer decided to have PP involved in the delivery process.
Her name is Shelly Booth SP (ex: 8667)

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Revised Text:

Hi CXC,

I reviewed the delivery process with the team after the last incident. Since then, we have stopped asking the customer to place a work order with PP concerning the packages that are over 50lbs.

For this particular situation, Tarik Mahrour, (ext: 8023) contacted Physical Plan directly, assuming that the old policy was still in place. During my conversation with Tarik he stated, “Ralph, this is how I have been doing it since I started working at Berklee".

Going forward, I asked Bruno and the rest of the staff to inform any customer who receives packages over 50 lbs. to get in touch with us first, before contacting Physical Plan.

I also want to take this opportunity to let you know that the only conversation I have had with a customer about Physical, a few days ago, was about some packages that needed to be delivered to a location where only Physical Plan had the key to access the storage room. The customer decided to have PP involved in the delivery process.

Her name is Shelly Booth, SP (ext: 8667)

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