The Field

by Glenn Gillis
(Quebec Canada)

Original Text: The Field


There were new houses being built on both sides of the road bringing to the ball-field, eventually, these houses would surly reach the ball field. As of now, surrounding the field were miles and miles of forest.
At the far end of the field within the placid forest lurked a mysterious presence. No one had the slightest idea that they were being carefully watched. This mysterious presence was monitoring there every movement with the upmost caution. Not even the sound of a cracking twig could be heard. Their ominous aspect seeks the tranquility of the night. Tonight something strange was accruing. It had startled them as the bright lights went on above the ball-field. Their natural sensors probed the humans as they arrived at the field. The worm blooded beings startled them, knowing that worm blood meant week and easy to manipulate. However, these warm-blooded beings did have the means to defend them-selves with primitive but still deadly weapons. These warm-blooded beings were much taller and stronger than they, but never as fast. This was not the first time they experimented on the warm-blooded.

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Revised Text:

There were new houses being built on both sides of the road leading to the ball-field. Eventually, these houses would surly reach the ball field, but as of then, surrounding the field were miles and miles of forest.

At the far end of the field, within the placid forest, lurked a mysterious presence. No one had the slightest idea that they were being carefully watched. This mysterious presence was monitoring their every movement with the utmost caution. Not even the sound of a cracking twig could be heard. The ominous aspect sought the tranquility of the night.

That night something strange was occruing. It had startled them when the bright lights went on above the ball-field. Their natural sensors probed the humans as they arrived at the field. The warm blooded beings startled them, knowing that warm blood meant weakness and ease to manipulate.

However, these warm-blooded beings had the means to defend them-selves with primitive, but still deadly weapons. The warm-blooded beings were much taller and stronger than they, but never as fast. This was not the first time they experimented on the warm-blooded.

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May 14, 2011
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interesting
by: Anonymous

Seems very interesting

May 01, 2011
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Great story
by: Anonymous

Great job and I love the story.

Apr 30, 2011
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by: Glenn Gillis

Good job.

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