Video Games

by Mary
(Canada)

Original Text: Video Games


My research is about gender differences in video games. I think the issue is quite important at this time, due to the large number and variety of games that exists. Between the varieties are sports, skills, battles, cooking, music, pets and action among others. Through a brief history of video games we can find the moment when the differences were more visible and also present a brief survey in which a group of boys and girls were asked what their favourite video game was. I will focus on finding these differences through the characters, the type of games and the social, cognitive and academic effects. It is noteworthy that in a private school is offered a course about Super Mario Melee: Theory and practice. Through the different articles I am going to concentrate in what the differences are and how they are exposed to children?

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Revised Text:

My research is on gender differences in video games. I think the issue is quite important at this time, due to the large number and variety of games that exist. Among the varieties are sports, skills, battles, cooking, music, pets and action and others.

Throughout the brief history of video games we can find the moments when the differences were more visible and also present a brief survey in which a group of boys and girls were asked what their favorite video game was. I will focus on finding these differences through the characters, the type of games, and the social, cognitive and academic effects.

It is noteworthy that a private school is offering a course on Super Mario Melee: Theory and practice.

Using several articles, I am going to concentrate on what the gender differences are and how they affect children.

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