The Field 11

by Glenn Gillis
(Lévis Quebec Canada)

Original Text: The Field 11

With the help of his father-in-law, Alan found himself a job working for (ABITIBI TRANSPORTS) and is always sure to have a promising offer as assistant manager. Jennifer and Helen are still the best of friends, but raising children sure takes a lot out of a person, so that stabilized them a bit. But they buy back the lost time whenever there’s a ball game.
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Cheers coming from the ball field could be heard at the playground. The children are having fun sinking their tiny hands into the sand making trails and everything they can imagine. Little Normand Chassé suddenly catches a glimpse of the other children in the bushes beside the small park. He thinks that maybe they are playing hide and seek. He looks at Barbra to see if she too had also noticed, but her mind is in her book and she is totally consumed by “LORD EDWARD” who is trying to convince the princess of his

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Revised Text:


With the help of his father-in-law, Alan found himself a job working for Abitibi Transports, and is sure to some day have an offer as assistant manager. Jennifer and Helen are still the best of friends, but raising children sure takes a lot out of a person, so they had stabilized a bit and they would buy back that lost time whenever there was a ball game.

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Cheers coming from the ball field could be heard at the playground. The children were having fun sinking their tiny hands into the sand, making trails and everything they could imagine. Little Normand Chassé suddenly caught a glimpse of the other children in the bushes beside the small park. He thought that maybe they were playing hide and seek. He looked at Barbra to see if she too had also noticed, but her mind was on her book. She was totally consumed by “LORD EDWARD”, who was trying to convince the princess of his

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